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Oneshot A Mary Sue Alphabet by Irony-Chan - K+

Discussion in 'Almost Recommended' started by Cruentus, May 13, 2007.

  1. Cruentus

    Cruentus Chief Warlock DLP Supporter

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    Title: A Mary Sue Alphabet
    Author: Irony-Chan
    Rating: K+
    Genre: Poetry/Humor
    DLP Category: Humor/parody
    Words: 1,497
    Published: January 12, 2005

    Status: Oneshot (complete)
    Summary: A's for Amanda Our hero's twin sister Got lost as a baby and Gosh, how he missed her...
    Link: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/2217444/1/

    I searched to see if this was already on the sight and didn't find it so I decided to post it and see what you thought. I found it rather amusing.



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  2. Jon

    Jon The Demon Mayor Admin DLP Supporter

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    Er..It's...nice. o_O Amusing.. kinda.
     
  3. MrINBN

    MrINBN Unspeakable

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    I got a laugh from it. The rhyming scheme's a bit off, but still pretty good. Bonus points for finding a sue name for the letter Z. And Q.
    4/5
     
  4. huntedorange

    huntedorange Seventh Year

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    i did laugh at this so i suppose it did what it set out to do, worth a read, or a skimming over. Pretty good idea actually and could maybe of been done better by a slightly better author because as said above the rhyming scheme is a little off. overall i have seen alot worse.
     
  5. Kari Black

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    This was funny...sorta anyway. Not very well written (as it was said before, the rhyme scheme is off), but the idea is decent. 2.75/5.
     
  6. Archer

    Archer Fourth Year DLP Supporter

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    Ehnn... I found a pretty much boring read, but I suppose it's readable. 2/5
     
  7. thisperson

    thisperson Denarii Host DLP Supporter

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    I laughed.

    And I don't think I have seen anything else like this apart from the mary sue guide.

    So bonus points, I guess, for being original.

    4/5 Like they said the rhyming scheme was off.
     
  8. darthdavid

    darthdavid Second Year

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    It was funny but the author really reached on some of the rhymes (and gave up on others).
     
  9. Snarf

    Snarf Squanchin' Party Bro! Prestige DLP Supporter

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    I've never been one for rhyming, but I smiled on some of the letters, especially M, F, and E. The author did seem to be grasping for some of the rhyming schemes there, but I give credit for amusement and original ideas.

    3.5/5 (round down to a three, please. I never round up)
     
  10. deathinapinkboa

    deathinapinkboa Minister of Magic

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    I have no problem with slant rymes. Shakespear did it all the time, so I don't see why other's can't.

    I thought this was fun. It wasn't great, but it did make me giggle.

    4/5
     
  11. emt10

    emt10 First Year

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    However, you need to remember that the reason Shakespeare was able to get away with what seems to us as forced rhyme was because in his days they weren't a forced rhyme. During the Elizabethan Age, pronunciation was still shifting as a result of the Great Vowel Shift, so many words were pronounced different they they are today. Also, there was no standard of pronunciation, so Shakespeare could pretty much rhyme anything that was somewhat similar in sound, though that is stretching it a bit.
     
  12. Darius

    Darius 13/m/box

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    Epic, 5/5

    Nicely done, must have taken a lot of time, sadly the best piece of fanfic I've read in a long while.
     
  13. Mercenary

    Mercenary Snake Eater

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    Amusing and true of the fanfiction world.
    4/5
     
  14. Mr. Merriman

    Mr. Merriman Seventh Year

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    I loved this. Speaking as a poet, the rhyme scheme is not at all bad, and is really rather impressive considering the number of verses and the originality of end words. While it's true of some works that the rhyme scheme should be very exact, it's long been accepted in poetry that "foot" and "book" is as equally valid a rhyme as "sweet" and "treat."

    The meter, however, is often sacrificed for the sake of both rhyme and internal logic, so that in places it can be awkward to read, breaking up the flow. The number of syllables per line and the pattern of stresses is just inconsistent enough to be distracting.

    However, for an amatuer work satirizing elements of fanfiction, this is excellent.

    5/5
     
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  15. KenderCleric

    KenderCleric Lord of Plot Bunnies

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    In school when our English class would turn to poetry my brain would go on vacation. I won't pretend to have more than a passing knowledge of rhyme, meter, cadence, etc. What I do know is that this made me laugh.

    As I said in my fanfiction.net review: In the immortal words of Homer Simpson, "It's funny because it's true."

    3/5
     
  16. Rosanna Lynn

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    It was actually funny and true.

    4/5
     
  17. Manatheron

    Manatheron Headmaster

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    a number of people have said, it's too true, too sadly Poetically true.

    4/5 worth a read, good for a laugh
     
  18. deathinapinkboa

    deathinapinkboa Minister of Magic

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    You don't read poetry do you.
     
  19. thapagan

    thapagan High Inquisitor

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    I think it is a dlp keeper. 4/5. It is short and sweet, a change of pace, and many of us have touched upon this mary sue thing.
     
  20. Iztiak

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    First I laughed because it was funny, then I cried because it was true.
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