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Complete Acts Infernal by samvimes - K?

Discussion in 'Almost Recommended' started by Bittersweet Freedom, Jul 28, 2011.

2.5714285373688/5, 7 votes
  1. Bittersweet Freedom

    Bittersweet Freedom Second Year

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    Jul 28, 2011 #1
    Title: Acts Infernal
    Author: samvimes
    Rating: PG
    Genre: Action, Angst
    DLP Category: AU
    Pairing: None
    Status: Complete
    Summary: An old man in Diagon Alley has a story to tell, if the price is right: about the gates of Hades, a silver boy and a sable boy, a cast-off angel, and a knife that can sever your soul.

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    4/5 Keep in mind it's an AU. A lot of what threw me off were the small inane didn't-have-to-be-there changes. Like Draco smoking. Or Remus as a bartender. Seriously could chosen a different job. Also, Draco's appearance was also pretty random.

    Excellent premise, rest of ch. 1 bit boring. Story really starts rolling in Ch.2.
     
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  2. Rym

    Rym Auror

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    Jul 28, 2011 #2
    That's quite a cliffhanger, buddy.
     
  3. Bittersweet Freedom

    Bittersweet Freedom Second Year

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    Jul 28, 2011 #3
    Sorry. Accidently clicked Enter. Fixed now.
     
  4. Tenages

    Tenages Order Member DLP Supporter

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    Jul 28, 2011 #4
    Again beautiful writing marred by stupidity. I got midway through the second chapter, to the point were Harry blithely decides to let Draco, who just admitted to being a Death Eater on a mission from Voldemort, come with him. Not only does Harry not do shit, but neither does Lupin or Dumbledore.

    There were numerous other little things that irked me, but that was huge. Really good writing, but the author decided to force a stupid plot device on us that doesn't make sense because it's what she wanted to write.

    The author also pushed a bunch of different mythologies together and frankly it didn't work well. It didn't seem like an organic meshing, no real synthesis of them took place. It was "oh here's a name from this mythology." "Oh here's a name from that mythology"

    Also the conversation between Lucious and Draco had me rolling on the floor laughing, which I'm assuming was absolutely not the intent of the author. I don't care how AU the story was it was ridiculous. "Fed dark magic with your mother's milk" GTFO.

    Beautiful writing does not make up for poor plotting, forced plot devices and a poorly meshed world.

    2-2.5/5
     
    Andro