Title: Age 23
Author: JeffD
Rating: T
Genre: General/Drama
DLP Category: General
Pairing: None
Words: 1,298
Published: October 1, 2006
Status: Complete, Oneshot
Summary: Harry preparing for the final battle. What has happened and who he is. Dark!Harry, Sadist!Harry [Post Hogwarts] [One Shot]
Link:
[DLP: Work by Author] http://forums.darklordpotter.net/showthread.php?t=4839
[Fanfiction.net] http://www.fanfiction.net/s/3179770/1/


Checked by Minion, July 27, 2013

 

This is so great, really great story!! Please do more!!

6/6

 

Whoa the whole raping thing really took me by surprise.

Nevertheless, Great plot and would be awesome if it was expanded on.
4/5

 

Blah Blah. Love it. Very dark and mysterious.

4/5.

 

Hey, not bad Jeff. Liked the ending 'cause it cycled well with the beginning.

4.5/5 - I think you should keep it one-shot though :s

 

When I saw the title I couldn't help thinking of the blink 182 song.

 

Honestly, what do all the rest of you see in this fic? I just saw an emo kid in disguise. Made me want to... rape a Death Eaters wife! Come on now, what kind of crap was that? Honestly.

-5/5

 

Not only is that review not citing what makes him an emo kid in disguise, but it's also a NECROPOST. It's been 22 days (give or take a day or two) since the last post for a topic that had only 5 posts before you. Let it DIE, or die instead.

 

I find it both ironic and hypocritical of you that you call this fic emo when your avatar displays a bloody white rose and a blood red moon.

 

Well, this was well-received at the time it was written, but I don't think it's library-worthy now.

It's basically an exercise in introspection. It's all telling and no showing, not even when Harry fights Voldemort. So the descent into darkness and obsession is quite monotonous.

And the literary device that Jeff uses as a gimmick among the most simplistic and overused in the history of the craft.

You know, where you have the opener repeated for the ending in this format:

I mean if you aggressively try to defend this story you can try to argue that the absence of this sentence:

suggests that whether Harry wins or loses, either who the survivor will be a monster and the world suffers.

In which case I refer you to this:

http://uncyclopedia.wikia.com/wiki/Peter_Chimaera

But the bottom line is this wasn't chilling or interesting enough.

2.5/5.