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Oneshot Apocalypso by Grinning Lizzard - M

Discussion in 'Humor' started by Fatality, Nov 2, 2011.

  1. Fatality

    Fatality Unspeakable

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    Title: Apocalypso
    Author: Grinning Lizard
    Rating: M
    Genre: Horror/Friendship
    Status: Complete
    Library Category: Humour
    Pairings: None
    Words: 6,497
    Published: July 22, 2011

    Summary: Harry finds himself in a hellish future. Semi-crack, TGYH challenge response. 1st Person POV and very, very strange.
    Link: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/7206371/1/APOCALYPSO

    This wasn't in the Library, but it definitely should be. 5/5 stuff in my opinion - I haven't laughed that hard in a while.

    I won't spoil the ending, as I'm certain you'll be surprised by it. Definitely not what I was expecting. Anyway, there isn't much more than I can say without ruining it, so just go read it. It's well written and entertaining, which you'd expect coming from Grinning Lizard.



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  2. T3t

    T3t Purple Beast of DLP Prestige DLP Supporter

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    I actually thought it was pretty fucking terrifying, not in the "shit your pants" way but in the "doom slowly creeps behind you" way.

    Except for the ending, which was fucking hilarious.

    5/5.
     
  3. Fatality

    Fatality Unspeakable

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    Oh, it was terrifying no doubt. I had some concern about categorising it as humour, but there wasn't a Horror category in the Library and like you said, the ending was fucking hilarious.
     
  4. T3t

    T3t Purple Beast of DLP Prestige DLP Supporter

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    Horror goes into Dark Arts, but I'm not really sure which is appropriate.
     
  5. Nargles

    Nargles Seventh Year

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    Wait a motherfucking second.

    How is this not in the Library?!
    This shit is creepy as hell. I used to take House-Elves for granted. Well, no more!!!

    Although, I find sadistic pleasure in Ron's death. The way he was just turning on that spit -- I laughed my ass off.

    Also, Rambo!Dobby is a fucking boss. And to think I hated the little shit...


    5/5, no doubt about it.
     
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  6. Oruma

    Oruma Unspeakable

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    It was bloody brilliant and still is. Fuckin'Awesome/5 and to the Library it goes.
     
  7. Grinning Lizard

    Grinning Lizard Supreme Mugwump

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    Thanks guys.

    I'm keen for as many legit crits on the writing as I can get. I wrote it in an extremely short timeframe but then struggled when it came to touching it up a bit. Just a mental block. I know it needs improvement, so any help that can be given would be ace. I think the present-tense/POV style threw me off big time.

    Cheers.
     
  8. JimmyCranberry

    JimmyCranberry High Inquisitor

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    Loved this when I first read it, and it hasn't dulled on me at all. I don't think anybody saw that ending coming...

    I'm also very surprised it hasn't been added to the Library yet. Cracking stuff, Gromit!

    5/5
     
  9. CrimsonEmperor

    CrimsonEmperor Squib

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    5/5.... Very creepy. I also agree with Nargles... Usually I hate Dobby...
     
  10. Desmir

    Desmir Squib

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    5/5 Ive never seen the house elf thing taken so far! Excelent work! Hermione was written very well as a ...well as a lunatic! I would have enjoyed her experiencing more of a defeat than instant death.

    She didnt really suffer or "realize she lost" it was all over in a moment.

    Maybe thats just me but I like the enemy to squirm a bit first.
     
  11. xavierp

    xavierp Guest

    Elves are far better in FanFiction than they were in canon. I am also firmly behind Hermione being insane. This story ticks a goodly number of boxes for me.

    5/5
     
  12. Infidel

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    The last sentence of the story was hilarious. Keep writing such stories GL.

    Cheers

    5/5
     
  13. Arbiter

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    Very well written, and I enjoyed it immensely.
    Without a doubt:

    5/5
     
  14. Henry Persico

    Henry Persico Groundskeeper DLP Supporter

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    Excellent story GL. One of my favorite’s one-shot.
    It shows great timing with, both, the start and finale (the idea of time-travel) and gives the story a good closure. Speaking of witch, it’s completely unexpected. The mystery behind Harry's amnesia or memory loss it's interesting; and the entire fic leaves more questions than answers.
    Well written, nice grammar, original idea, I give you a 5/5.