Title: Bowling For Hogwarts
Author: zArkham
Rating: T
Genre: Drama/Tragedy
Status: One-shot complete
Library Category: General/ almost recommended
Pairings: none
Summary:
Time and time again the Bad Guys do bad things and get away with it. Time and time again the Good Guys take the low blow and just soldier on with their upper lips stiff. What might happen if someone couldn't hold it together? How would Magical Britain react? More to the point; who would they blame? A little One-Shot in documentary style.
Link: https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10755544/1/Bowling-For-Hogwarts

zArkham takes us what happens when people are bullied enough to the point it explodes.
The life in Hogwarts during book 1-5 are rip for that, bullying is one by many people are rarely they are punished, when you try to stand up to them, you end up suffering more.
Until a big event happen that throws everything into the wind, in this case the character who does it, isn't the usual suspect

I really liked this one-shot and it leaves opening for new world AU to explore in the aftermath of this events.

Grammar, writing skills and other technical stuff, can't really comment because i'm poor judge for all the above.

I'm not sure yet how to rate this one-shot 4/5 or 5/5.

 

This one-shot absolutely reeks of angst.

This piece shares similarities with those Wrong!BWL/Betrayed!Harry fics, wherein the protagonist has been dealt a ludicrously horrible fate and proceeds to completely destroy all perceived *enemies*. Those fics aren't necessarily bad - provided you enjoy a good old wank fest - if they're done in a tasteful and tolerable manner. I myself occasionally enjoy them as decent time-wasters.

Unfortunately, the same could not be said for this flaming pile of garbage.

The fic reads as though the flame of righteous fury herself has descended from Valhalla to smite all those who have done our precious protagonists harm. Snape? Malfoy? Mustache-twirling Dumbledore? None are spared in this 8k word-long rant about how Harry and company have been oh so so wronged.

The fic in it's entirety might have even been tolerable if the writing was any good. There is a pathetically thin attempt to add dimension by bringing in different characters to be in 'interviewed' - but they all sound exactly similar to the extent that the names before the text had no meaning. Pacing is all over the place, and makes an already banal piece even more of a pain to read.

2/5 and even then I'm seriously considering changing that to 1/5.

 

Not going to rate because I only made to the end of Hermione's interview, but what I did read was very cringy and includedo tropes that I'm not a fan of including slight Muggle wank and Dumbledore bashing. It seemed to be classic indy Harry stuff and I've read enough of that recently.

Credit where it's due though the idea to tell the story in interviews separated with scene setters was something that I quite liked.

 

This is trash. The format is annoying and a poor way to tell a story. The plot is a godawful handful of cliches - which can be okay, but they're executed exceedingly poorly as well. The author has clearly misunderstood everything JKR was attempting to accomplish and has little understand of basic literary device.

Out of everything here, the only novel element was the disclaimer. And even that was irritating, because of what an absurd piece of wank it is to include such disclaimers.

2/5

 

The only nice thing I have to say about this fic is that the author has a decent grasp of the nuts and bolts of writing. Grammar, punctuation, and spelling are all generally correct. The style is amusing, but it’s executed poorly. I don’t read stories to read a script.

Otherwise, this is a pile of shit, and I will never have those twenty minutes back.

1/5

 

Egh, one of the greatest mistakes in this story is the 'telling, not showing'. It's an acquired taste yet I feel that it greatly reduces the quality of the story. This story also regurgitates pretty much all of the indie!Harry fanfic:

• Evil!Dumbles
• Dumbles imprisoned

I like the original concept but feel like it's just two persons; the people don't seem to have any character; all conversation is the same.

All in all, the story feels like https://www.fanfiction.net/s/12335841/3/The-101-Guide-To-Writing-the-Ultimate-Fanfiction, it really does!

2/5 (not 1/5 because of the original concept)

 

I knew it was going be a school shooting inspired story from the title.

It's a shit fic. I'd give it a zero if I could, but a 1/5 will have to do.