Or would it just explode?

 

I am afraid I must agree with those that said the goblins need more magic.

I just wanna know what else protects the city apart from the zombies. I mean sure Tom left a shitload of undead in the place but Im willing to bet that if this Tom is anything like TFtCD Tom he isnt stupid enough to just assume that his ward making the city invisible and unplottable and the zombies are enough to stop a determined Dumbledore, Flitwick, and others.

 

Hey, I call 'em like I see 'em. I was critical when I saw some problems earlier in the fic, but jbern has been absolutely on fire for the last seven or eight chapters.

I hope that Harry/Luna is dead now. My personal policy is that when somebody threatens you with something, you should treat them as if they had followed through with the threat, at least as far as trusting them goes. So:
"You burn dinner one more time and I'm going to sock you in the eye" -> somebody who will resort to physical abuse.
"If you don't do <x>, no sex for you tonight" -> somebody who is willing to use sex as a tool to get what they want.
"If you do <x>, I'm telling Dumbledore what you've been up to" -> somebody who is willing to betray a life or death secret given in confidence.

They can be friendly acquaintances, but I don't think Harry and Luna could have any sort of relationship requiring mutual trust for a long time. In real life, friendships end all the time; in fanfic, they often survive way longer than they should because the author wants them to (look at the various first year AUs where Hermione is a complete bitch and Harry busts his ass to win her over for no apparent reason). I've never seen any sign of that happening in jbern's fics, so Harry/Luna would likely require something to happen that we couldn't predict right now.

Harry/Patil sisters is still on the table, though.

 

An excellent new chapter jbern, you seem to be like a fine wine, you get better with age.

However, one thing that I noticed when I went back to re-read the first chapter, in the second paragraph, first sentence it says 'So clearly longing for family isn’t a priority, so lets exam loved ones'

I think that instead of 'exam' loved ones, you probably mean 'examine.' Nothing huge, just thought I'd point it out.

Still, well done and I am eagerly awaiting the next installment

 

This chapter has once again proven to me, that you, Jbern, are intuitably the master of build-ups toward a battle scene. Even if I already read the 1st chapter, I couldn't even pshisically restrain myself from reading it again just because all the gathered hype from the last chapter. The last couple of paragraphs even sent chills down my back.

The letter towards Luna is, I suppose, the turning point in their relationship, no?

In the "problem" of the goblins needing more magic.

I absolutely disagree.

You managed to make a good balance between making Goblins interesting but not overpowered. Adding to their abilities would just ruin the whole balance. Why would Goblins need more magic anyway? As you said they are accountants. And why would they want to turn into animals in this battle scene? Fighting dead stuff that won't give up until their beaten to a pulp doesn't sound like the things that I would try fighting hand to hand.

All in all, another marvelous chapter, the latest in a long line of worship worthy chapters.

Rake

 

As for the Goblins in the chapter 1. They couldn't take worg, so quickly after taking the 'filthy human potion'. It will be mentioned in the next chapter. The goblins used the best weapons at their disposal against the Inferi. They weren't terribly effective and 4 of the 8 died.

All 8 of the goblins were capable of turning into bears using worg.

Harry and Luna are still on the table. The only couple that's off the table is Harry/Karina - that's over.

One of the reviewers said that Fleur had a 'territorial' vibe when she was angering the Canadian Trio and that there must be something there. Fleur may be taking a sisterly interest in Harry's love life. She actually could be considering keeping Harry on the back burner. She could even be grooming him for a future relationship with Gabby.

To answer another question - there's an awful lot of inferi, but that's just the start. Of course there are other defenses out there. I wouldn't go to all this trouble getting them there for five chapters of Resident Evil. Plenty of more things to encounter. Traps, creatures. All of the humans survived the beachhead, but I can only guarantee that Harry is still alive at the end.

Jim

 

noooo don't kill bill!!!!

on the topic of the goblins, a hand held pistol with explosive bullets is actually quite capable of inflicting large holes into human bodies, so they aren't THAT weak.

 

I have but one thing to say:

Awesomeness once again.

Jbern, we salute you!

 

I have to say that I absolutely love this story and it has rocketed up to my #1 in HP fan fiction.
I loved the last few chapters and am in agony waiting for the next one.
Keep up the good work!

 

I was thinking about what I posted last night about hoping there was more than inferi and I realized. THIS IS JIM he isnt THAT dumb.

 

Please kill Bill. For Harry to be completely independent Bill needs to die. Plus it'll open up some Harry/Fleur action.

 

After reading this latest chapter (excellent, as always) I went back and re-read chapter 1 and found a new appreciation for it. The first time through I don't think I could completely appreciate what was happening, and I'm sure part of that was the new writing style that I've since become used to. After reading it now, I would go so far as to say it's one of my favorite chapters thus far, and the point of view that was originally confusing now really enhances the chapter given what we know of Harry's character. This story is really coming together and I commend you on a superb job.

-the Jack

 

Kudos on a job well done.
The first time I read this story I had trouble with the first chapter and had to quit. After over a dozen trials to get past chapter 1 I finally made it through and I can say that the effort spent was worth it. Now that I've reread the first chapter I can say that there's a new sense of appreciation for it. You now have me hooked.

I hope this doesn't get shot down. There are only a handful of H/Gabby fics out there that are worth reading. Besides, who's better to write one of my favorite ships other than a demigod among fanfic authors?

 

Well ive always preferred TFtCD over this fic, but i must say that you've changed my mind with your latest chapter. The characterization is so well done, especially harry and Luna. The action should also be really good but what I am most looking forward to is how Harry reacts when he gets back to England (you did say he was going back to Hogwarts at some point right?). Keep up the good work on both fics

 

Really enjoyed this chapter, as always. very much awaiting what is going happen next (as we know from chapter one what is actually going to happen next but from there). i love the way you have done this fic, give us a taste of what is going to come then going back to show where it came from. a lot of writers could learn from you. Well done 5/5 again as always ( sorry if my spelling is bad, i am REALLY drunk)

 

I think this is taking the number one place in my favourite fics to. I used to like TFtCD more due to it being a more traditionally written story with more politics and stategy which I always enjoy reading. But this story has such good secondary charecters that capture your imagination. In TFtCD you make good use of existing charecters and flesh out ones with not much canon to them (Susan).

In Bungle you have created a whole new group of people who are both funny and well thought out. The way you have used Hack as more than just a bit of comic relife.

That and the way Harry is getting powered up is better. In TFtCD you are making him work for it but here it just seems more real. He is desperate for the knowledge and really had nothing else to do.

I eagerly await the city of the dead.

 

All I've got to say is... DON"T KILL BILL! He's just coooool. lol.

Sweet story man, keep up the good work!

 

I really do hope you kill Bill. He nearly ruined the fic for me in the beginning because I think you tried to make him to perfect. Hot girlfriend, powerful cursebreaker, knowledge of Horcruxes, always has an answer for Harry, etc. He was like Dumbledore at the age of 26 or however old he is. Plus the lecture he gave Harry about "letting it go" nearly made me hate him.

 

Really? Wow Bill is favourite character. He helps with out manipulating. He is shown to have flaws. Hemore or less lets Harry do what he wants while only stopping really stupid shit and giving advise not orders.

Plus if HArry didn't "Let it go" He would just get and angsty possibly blow his cover by trying to get revenge and not focus on th eimporant shit ie Training.

 

Bill does seem to have that powerful and all-knowing tendency we would regularly associate with Dumbledore and that might be considered bad by others. On the other hand it's pretty much what I like about Bill in this fic. He is the authority figure but he never goes as far as put a leash on Harry. He doesn't tell Harry to follow stereotype behaviour but lets him try things out for himself. If its good its good and if its bad then suffer the consequences.