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Chandelier- Artemis Day- PG13

Discussion in 'Almost Recommended' started by Manatheron, Apr 3, 2009.

3.4242424964905/5, 33 votes
  1. Manatheron

    Manatheron Headmaster

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    Apr 3, 2009 #1
    Title: Chandelier
    Author: Artemis Day
    Rating:pG-13
    Genre:Humor
    DLP Category:Funny stories
    Pairing: H/Hr
    Status:Complete
    Summary: Harry Potter, Alan Granger immediately decided, was probably the worst sort of son-in-law imaginable. Based on a true story.
    Link: Here

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    Speaks for it's self.
     
  2. Anme

    Anme Professor

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    Apr 3, 2009 #2
    Meh. Nothing that keeps the interest. Pretty predictable ending and not that funny or so.

    2/5
     
  3. Rahkesh Asmodaeus

    Rahkesh Asmodaeus THUNDAH Bawd Admin DLP Supporter

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    Apr 3, 2009 #3
    Eh. I was amused. 4/5
     
  4. Marsupial

    Marsupial Minister of Magic DLP Supporter

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    Apr 3, 2009 #4
    I agree with the tandoori duck. Short and reasonably amusing, pretty much what a humor oneshot should be.
     
  5. Rahkesh Asmodaeus

    Rahkesh Asmodaeus THUNDAH Bawd Admin DLP Supporter

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    Apr 3, 2009 #5
    ... I loath you.
     
  6. vlad

    vlad Banned ~ Prestige ~

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    Apr 3, 2009 #6
    It wasn't bad... but it wasn't really that good either.

    3/5
     
  7. Kensington

    Kensington Denarii Host DLP Supporter

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    Apr 3, 2009 #7
    It was fairly entertaining. Yet as Vlad said, it wasn't great either.

    3/5.

    Sree/Narf/Jolly Rancher/Daffy Duck: Shouldn't you have said "You're dithspicable"?
     
  8. LuxDragon

    LuxDragon Fourth Year

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    Apr 4, 2009 #8
    For a 1-shot. 4/5. I smiled and I needed one today.
     
  9. meatzman2

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    Apr 4, 2009 #9
    It was alright, I think I would have enjoyed it more if they had been having sex though. As it was the surprise ending well I can't say I expected it, but it didn't make me crack a smile.

    3/5 because it's averagely amusing.
     
  10. Silens Cursor

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    Apr 4, 2009 #10
    Not what I expected but not really amusing either. Nothing that made me laugh out loud, and I caught onto the 'twist' pretty quickly. In short, nothing that really kep me entertained. I'm giving it 2/5 for some entertaining dialogue, but nothing higher.
     
  11. Korisovra

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    Apr 13, 2009 #11
    Meh. Amusing, sort of. 3.5/5
     
  12. Aekiel

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    Apr 13, 2009 #12
    Well this is just my sort of humour so I laughed uproariously at it. 4/5 from me.
     
  13. Mordecai

    Mordecai Drunken Scotsman –§ Prestigious §– DLP Supporter

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    Apr 13, 2009 #13
    It got a laugh form me, and the author didn't try to over extend it beyond where it needed to finish. So 4/5.
     
  14. Snarf

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    Apr 13, 2009 #14
    I'm surprised with the general apathy towards this story. I thought it was bloody perfect, if a bit predictable. Still, that just made me laugh all the more when you finally came to the twist. I think this deserves to be in the library for that quick, refreshing humor that most authors don't achieve. 4/5 for me.
     
  15. sincostan

    sincostan High Inquisitor

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    Apr 13, 2009 #15
    Funny, but the revelation of the punchline at the end is a little flat. 3/5.
     
  16. Stenstyren

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    Apr 13, 2009 #16
    The ending should maybe have been shorter so that the punchline came quicker. Think that would have been more of a laugh.

    Still a good story, 3,5 from me!
     
  17. Richard

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    Apr 13, 2009 #17
    I'm also giving it a 3. It made me smile, but that's about all it did. I say it's Bin worthy at the least.
     
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