Fair enough. I'll save the next ten chapters for tomorrow night I think, may as well make it last.

 

When we getting the cat fight of the century and when the hell are they going to figure out a way to reverse the demons effects due to the bloody sword?

 

No catfight. I don't see any purpose behind it. And they can't reverse the demon's corruption, though they want to believe that they can. I will separate Harry from the demon in my own way, but it won't be from anything the girls do. No OMFG TEH POWUR OF TWOO LUFF crap in my stories.

 

atleast make the dumpster evil and have weasel die in battle

 

I've been folowing this one almost since the beginning and I have to say this is truly one of the vangaurds of Dark!Harry fiction everywhere, well written, few cliches used, cliches that were used were done well, decent update speed, and badass weapons, powers, and attacks. I give it a 9/10 overall rating. I think some of my only complaints are that Dumbledore seems to be cowed by Harry just a little too easy because even Harry in the story has admitted that Dumbledore is still more powerful than him, though he's gaining fast. The other thing was just that I thought the whole Voldemort becoming a Lich King kinda came out of left field with little explanation as to why, seems more like something you came up with mostly just to keep him from dying and having to come up with a new dark lord so Harry wouldn't immediately start his takeover of the wizarding world. But those are just two rather small things and despite those this is one of my favorite stories in progress right now and I hope you regain your enthusiasm for writing it soon because while a work that an author doesn't put his soul into can be great it can never be outstanding.

 

I've only got a couple pages left on this chapter, should be up late tomorrow. It adds some finality to the Harry/Greyback alliance and features Arthur Weasley's funeral, where all Hell breaks loose when Voldemort decides to test out his new powers in Ottery St. Catchpole's cemetary. Also has a somewhat emotionally charged duel between Harry and Lucius Malfoy, a small beginning step on the road to reconciliation between Harry and Dumbledore, and the first serious injury among Harry's trained allies. I think you'll be surprised to see who gets nailed.

 

it was really good untill you stoped updating frequently and then when you did it wasnt as good of quality

 

Great to hear we can expect an update soon

 

Can you make Voldemort a little more... mortal? The whole Lich idea is just a little to overpowing imo. Definitly looking forward to the next chapter though.

 

Well...I kinda want him to be overpowering. He's not really immortal in the strictest sense. He can still be killed, but Harry's attack on Halloween wasn't enough to do it. It'll probably be another day before the chapter is out. I have a midterm tomorrow and prepping for it is taking more time than I had anticipated.

 

Chapter 30 was a pretty solid chapter and a good reminder of why I liked this story. Lupin's funeral and the battle scene were both very well done.

I love that Harry wants to test his magic against Voldemort's, but at the same time it feels like he'd be smart enough not to make a choice that could leave him overly vulnerable. It also made the whole battle feel a bit anticlimactic.

 

Good chapter, nice to see you getting back into the groove of things...kind of at least. Always been a fan of fancy spell work so I loved the graphic battle scenes. Got to say that I saw what happened to Cho from a mile away, since you did pretty much tell us that would happen.

The Harry-Fenrir moment was also an excellent. The "quid pro quo" deal was simple but quite realistic. Personally, Harry's honeyed words seemed a bit cheesy to me but it could have been just sweet talking I guess. Still, the fact that you pulled it off was great. Most people just don't ever bother to think in real political terms about such things so big points right there. Of course I'm also glad about how you wrote it since now I know there's no chance of me accidently copying off of you as my idea is completely different. :mrgreen:

Last thing though is that that little Fleur moment sticks out to me (maybe because since she's the major female character in my story). What do you have planned hmm?? 8) Great chapter, much better than the last few I thought, though it might be because of the good mood I'm in right now...but whatever. Good luck on the rest of the story.

 

I think it was just an OK chappy. I like your political maneuverings better. The whole battle in the graveyard seemed a bit surreal, especially with the whole Inferi using wands thingy. Seems like Voldemort is being overpowered a bit here. And i'm not saying that's a bad thing in your fic since megalomaniac!Harry needs a nemesis who can match him without being too easy. Killing Rookwood seemed to easy IMO though. Sure, he's a researcher, but he should have come upon some 'interesting' spells or whatnots during the course of his research.

I can't say i've seen that cho moment coming up though. Thank god for phoenixes! That was a good move on Voldemort's part. If you can't go for the jugular, go for the heart seems to apply in that situation. Meh... That was just a quote I thought of when reading that scene.

The interaction with Fenrir was well-written as well. I always like the fact that you incorporate a little bit of political maneuvering in almost every chapter. It sets the stage for bigger things in the future and always leaves me giddy with anticipation. Still, not your best chapter but a good one nonetheless.

 

Harry didn't give Rookwood time to do anything. He kept moving as he absorbed the Imperio and then cleaved Rookwood before he could do anything else. As for the Inferi...it's a bit complicated but I'll try.

When a wizard dies, some of his or her soul remains in their body, in essence part of their magical core. That is, unless they were killed in such a way that destroys the soul entirely (read: Avada Kedavra or the Dementor's Kiss). Therefore, once raised via true necromancy (not the Inferi way, which consumes that soul in exchange for the one-time raising), they can still do their magic to a degree unless that soul part is destroyed (like when Harry used the AK on that one witch, she had no magic and attacked with her hands the second time up). Like, had Cedric come up to battle, he would not have had his magic, since he was slain via the Killing Curse back during the Third Task and his soul was destroyed.

 

It seems like Harry has gotten a little too dark. Now seems like a good opportunity for Harry to begin to rein in Zharrgast. For a while he seemed excessively dark. This is also a good opportunty for Harry to earn political points w/ Dumbledore and others. Mention the fear he felt when Cho was attacked and how the Wizarding People have the right to not live in fear. His approval ratings will go through the roof, make him more of a political figure, and hopefully smooth the transition when he takes over later.

P.S. Harry REALLY needs to learn to apparate. The fact that someone in 7th Year knows such a fundamental magical skill, but Harry doesn't is upsetting to say the least, and undermines Harry's credibility. He also needs to learn healing spells. VOldemort knew how to make a Silver Hand for Wormtail, I bet Dumbledore knows some. Make this a turning point for Harry. He should realize that he needs to learn more than destructive spells. Harry's ignorance was really showcased in this chapter (weather, apparating, healing)

YOu could even argue that right now, an auror is more knowledgeable than Harry in certain, possibly more valuable, fields of magic. All Harry knows how to do is fight.

 

I agree with Chuck, plus it seems like Voldemort's power level is getting way too high for Harry's level.

 

That was a great chapter. I loved both scenes.

Greyback as a priest on Remus's funeral was brilliant. I'm just not sure he would have accepted to live in some enchanted dark forest - remember, werewolves are stil human 29 days/month. I don't think they would just give up shops and fast food and everything else that comes with civilisation. No, I think that equal rights, maybe with a part of Diagon Alley to call their own (like China-town) would have done the trick.

The funeral was brilliant too. I liked Harry's interaction with Dumbledore and the choices he had to make. I however do agree with Voldemort's power being over the top and not well explained. You need to explain what he exactly is, how he became that, what are his abilities and how he can be killed. I guess, like this, he seems more like an undestructable boogeyman than a real character.

 

I actually don't have a problem with Voldemort's power.

So far, the only thing a lich can do is resurrect the dead WITH magical abilities. HIs explanation was good.

I got no beef with it AS long as he keeps Voldemort within reason. BUt this is a dangerous path. ANymore power, and Voldemort becomes too much.

 

Nah, I was thinking more about him dieing over and over again, like a manga character

It's just that, since Voldemort doesn't have horracruxes (as far as I can remember), there needs to be some other explanation for him surviving that attack with chaotic energy and what exactly would it take to kill him... Because, if he's truly immortal and neither Harry nor Dumbledore can harm him, what's stopping him from simply waltzing around, launching curses at people and laughing maniacally at anyone trying to stop him?

 

...I thought I did explain how he survived. His Lich resurrection was a one-shot deal. He isn't automatically going to get up every time, but it will take a bit more than Harry's chaotic magic to finish him. He had just enough demonic blood in him due to the ritual in the graveyard (remember from early on that demonic blood grants some resistance to chaotic magic...not much, but just enough in this case) to allow him to survive the attack when combined with the fact that he was and still is echelons more magically powerful than Harry. Throughout this story, despite the demonic heritage and cool toys and powers, I have always done my best not to turn Harry into a complete god in terms of powers or attitude/intelligence. He can still be beaten, and he is still very prone to making inexperienced blunders, and I don't feel inclined to change that to satisfy those who want to see him blaze through anything and everything without breaking a sweat. I feel that he's plenty strong as he is, and the fact that he's not uber-proficient in every form of magic imaginable is by design. I'll give you a hint about Tom's demise. In the end, it won't be strictly Harry that puts him to the sword. Trust me, some stuff will be revealed soon to show that Voldemort and his war effort aren't as unbreakable and solid as they seem.

The werewolves...Greyback is cynical about equal rights. He knows that his people can build their own civilization in the forest. All the things they like about the outside world, they can recreate there (and Harry will fund and otherwise assist their efforts to do so, which Greyback will insist upon before making their deal final). In the end, he knows in his heart that human wizards are never going to accept werewolves as equals. Harry can order it, but he can't force change in their hearts and minds. Equal rights only means protection under the law and such. It's not enough to alleviate his peoples' suffering. No, Greyback would rather secede from human wizarding society altogether.