Here's a small sneak preview for those interested.

[spoiler:1c0fbafa98]Words failed Snape at the scene that greeted him. Harry met his shocked coal black eyes and sneered, shifting the position of his arm to allow Draco’s body to slide slowly down onto the unforgiving floor. His breathing was shallow and his eyes were glazed over. The greasy Potions professor rushed down to check on his favorite student. Adrian Pucey glared hard in Cho’s face, enraged at the fact that the Head Girl had been a party to this. None would even look at Harry. All had known of Draco Malfoy’s hatred for Harry Potter and had seen the Gryffindor icon’s willingness to use lethal force against his enemies during the train incident. It was inevitable that things would eventually come to this. Snape bared his yellowed teeth and snarled at Harry with revulsion burning in his eyes as he examined his pupil. Harry stared back down at him with cold and unreadable eyes and brought his left foot crashing forcefully down onto Draco’s neck. The ferret was put out of his misery with a single loud snap that echoed throughout the hollow dungeon.[/spoiler:1c0fbafa98]

 

Definitely darker, does this mean we get an update soon?

 

Tomorrow, I think. I'm about half done with this chapter.

 

That sounds fucking hot. I can't wait, finish now!

 

PLEASE UPDATE!!! DON'T TEASE!!!


(I have no will power)
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Lord Serapheth, your LT2000!? i had no idea!

 

Posted, not the best I've done, but hopefully decent enough.

 

I enjoyed that for the most part, but compared to the excerpt, I thought it wasn't as dark as advertised and rather inconsistant. He didn't intend to kill anyone, just fight, ignoring the fact that only by pure luck did the most powerful dark wizard on the planet just barely survive his wrath, making for a fight that could in no way be satisfying (even againstSnape) unless he did kill. Then not only does he fail to kill Snape, who so clearly earned the execution, but he was actually cautious about fighting a bunch of elderly folk. I don't care how great an Auror Moody was, hes over the hill, limps and was bested and locked up for a year by the very dark wizards Harry can literally mow through with no trouble. Minerva or whoever else was even a smaller problem. Dumbledore was barely able to stand and was wiped out, and he is both mortal and very old, meaning even with magic he should not have been able to recover as quickly as Harry. Yet he not only didn't fight them, but when he had Dumbles completely defenseless, he just bound some information to secrecy! I admit, its a nice bit of psychological torture, but it will inevitable lead to the headmaster being free to impede him again once he's regrouped. Did he learn nothing? One second hes a cold bastard, the next he's just a jerk who isn't willing to kill someone who is a comlete and utter threat to everything he stands for. And you top it off by saying you feel sorry for the old twat and they may still ally in the end. Not very promising or even very dark.

Just my opinion, no offense meant. I still liked it regardless, it just makes me concerned for the direction the fic will go in if he's still being such a wuss.

 

He had a reason for not killing Dumbledore, that I hadn't chosen to reveal yet. He owes the old man a life bond for saving him down in the village. Harry may be a bastard, but he still has some semblance of honor at this point. And taking on all four of those professors at once would be difficult for any wizard, to say nothing of a somewhat battle weary and weakened Harry. Harry has now seen how mortal Albus really is, and really isn't as afraid of him as he has been in the past. And just killing the old man isn't enough for him. Harry wants to crush him and force him to watch as his entire world comes crashing down. The point being, there's not a whole lot that Albus CAN do to impede him. He can't defeat Harry by himself anymore, and he can't gather any support for taking him down due to the fact that the truth is bound within him and the whole of the wizarding world views Harry as a hero and is occupied with Tom. He can do little other than sit and watch. Harry wants to likewise make Snape suffer through watching him rise to power. Harry has ruined the man's life, and now he's content to just let him fester in his own misery. If you've been at all paying attention to the way that I write, you will know that much of the reasoning behind what I do is not immediately obvious. Just wait and see how everything pans out. I can assure you that Harry is NOT a wuss and will be doing some things much. much worse than what you saw here. And he has to be careful. Much of what he's doing relies on having popular support. He can't just run around killing people at will, or else he risks compromising everything he's worked for.

 

Okay, the Dumbles thing makes sense, if he truely can't impede him (I wasn't sure, since you made a point of showing Harry was getting overconfident, I was worried perhaps he was again working up to earning himself some come-uppance.

The teachers... I can see why he didn't care to fight them, but I dunno... I couldn't imagine Voldie, Harry's only true equal IMO, just standing down because they are a formidable team, nor can I imagine if they did fight, the group surviving Harry or Voldie. If it was a tactical decision to keep his image good, I can understand, but snape is a DE, he could have gotten away with that, and ducking Moody whilst slitting Snape's throat or something seems possible to me. I just don't see the advantage to letting him go. What's to stop Snape, now completely 'useless' and even more bitter, from having Voldie give Snape new, functional hands or w/e, and informing Voldie abbout Harry's weapons (the new hand, the identity of the sword if he doesn't already know)... you see my concern (while putting myself in Harry's shoes)?

I don't understand the life bond, wouldn't everyone Harry directly or indirectly saved by staving off Voldie everytime owe him one then, including Dumbledore who would clearly have been killed fighting Voldie solo had Harry not been there? Wouldn't that nullify his debt to Dumbles? This, of course, assuming the life bond is somehow enforcable... I think the fact that Wormtail has yet to repay his debt, and seems quite incapible, in canon shows that it isn't as strong as say, and unbreakable vow or something.

 

I really liked this chapter but you made atleast one mistake that I noticed:

'Harry kept the Demarr Devil Blade in his artificial right hand and summoned his wand back into his left. '

compared to all your other statements where it is his left hand that is the artificial one 'After returning from having a medical procedure performed on my destroyed left arm'

Not a biggy but it had me confused going back and forth trying to figure out which one was actually the clawed one.

 

You're right, I noticed that mistake earlier too. I meant to fix it and forgot.

 

I really think Snape was more a case of Harry just forgettiing about him. Yeah, he doesn't mind letting him wallow, but the trust is that he was attacked again right as he went to finish off Snape, and didn't dare kill him right in front of the old man for fear of provoking a fight that he might very well lose. And Volde can't fix his arm. The wound has to be very fresh in order to perform that prodecure, and Snape's wouldn't be. Nor do I see Tom having enough mercy on the man to succour him after getting his ass kicked by Harry Potter.

 

I was thinking more of them (vold/sev) severing (no pun intended) further up the arm and replacing the whole shebang, since he did give the rat one, and the rat seemingly has done nothing for him before or since the resurrection. But if you have no plans for voldie to do so, I guess that takes care of it.


Something I forgot tp ask... how strong is his claw hand? I thought, having fucked up the demon door, it was like freakin indestructable, but then that spell was fucking it up... so is it vulnerable in general? Vulnerab;e to magic? Shouldn't Harry try to find a way to enchant it to absorb or deflect typical dark magic so as one of his neatest weapons doesnt get destroyed by som pansy like Snape?

 

The ruby itself can be broken, though it is still much stronger than the normal flesh he would have had otherwise. He was able to tear up the door because he was using choatic energy at the time. Harry didn't have the claw charged up when he was using it to deflect Snape's attacks. And yes, the claw's vulnerability is something that he will take note of and perhaps find a way to fix.

 

will harry go in the demonic realm ? ask for troops/backup he is the prince afterall

 

Yes, that is within the current plotline, but don't expect for him to be there too long. Two to four chapters maybe.

 

He probably will go eventually so that he can achieve his animagus form, which will hopefully be ubercool 8)