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Abandoned Dudley's Dilemma by Taran Fortescue - PG

Discussion in 'Almost Recommended' started by selenepotter, Jan 13, 2006.

2.5999999046326/5, 10 votes
  1. selenepotter

    selenepotter First Year

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    Jan 13, 2006 #1
    Title: Dudley's Dilemma
    Author: Taran Fortescue
    Rating: PG
    Genre: General, Humor
    Pairings: H/Luna
    Chapters: 3
    Words: 9247
    Published: April 27, 2004
    Updated: April 21, 2005
    Status: Abandoned
    Summary: A "terrible" thing has happened to Dudley Dursley's family. His eldest daughter, Priscilla, has received a letter from Hogwarts! Finally, after fifteen years of no conversation, Dudley is having to contact his cousin, Harry Potter, whose own daughter is going to Hogwarts as well.
    Link: http://www.fictionalley.org/authors/taran_fortescue/DD.html


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  2. Giovanni

    Giovanni God of Scotch

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    Jan 13, 2006 #2
    I read this a while ago... Found it funny, but not all that funny... Just sort of ironic.

    Then it didn't update/got abandoned.
     
  3. darklordmike

    darklordmike Headmaster

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    Aug 4, 2009 #3
    There are only three chapters and 9k words, and it hasn't updated in four years.

    The writing is solid, but the story doesn't get beyond setting up its initial premise. We haven't even met Dudley's daughter, and I don't think the author developed a plot to accompany the idea.

    The characterization is weak. Harry is married to Luna, and she is, of all things, ordinary and dull. That's criminal when writing Luna.

    2/5 - The story is abandoned, but probably wouldn't have been library-worthy anyway.
     
  4. Scrittore

    Scrittore Groundskeeper

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    Aug 5, 2009 #4
    Another disappointment from the ship I like most, Harry/Luna. It's well written, but the story didn't far before being abandoned. As already stated, a boring Luna is not a good Luna.

    So due to the short length (3 chapters, almost 10k words), it being abandoned, and it being boring I'll give it a rating of 2/5. The only thing that saves it from being a 1/5 is that it's well-written.

    This is definitely not Library or Recycle Bin worthy.
     
  5. prion

    prion Second Year

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    Dec 15, 2013 #5
    I definitely enjoyed Dudley's POV in the first chapter, but I find it strange that his perfectly, respectable, and completely normal wife is going around with black nails.

    It was odd with Luna acting more normal, but if you can get past that, this Potter family had some nice, little funny moments.

    The last chapter with the clothing shop was what I'd expect from a wizarding store with an eccentric owner, but not a well-known muggle brand.

    I gave it a 3/5 because it's been abandoned but I think it has a good start.
     
    Last edited: Dec 15, 2013