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WIP God of the Machine by The Carnivorous Muffin - T - Death Note

Discussion in 'Trash Bin' started by Andrela, Nov 14, 2013.

  1. Andrela

    Andrela Plot Bunny DLP Supporter

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    Title: God of the Machine
    Author: The Carnivorous Muffin
    Rating: T
    Genre: Horror/Friendship
    Status: WIP
    Fandom: Death Note
    Pairings: none
    Summary: Upon entering the world of Death Note Anna Jones considers her survival and the prices she is willing to pay.
    Link: God of the Machine


    Before you lynch me for posting a Self-Insert story, please consider the actual content.

    First thing: This SI does not have any special powers, isn't all that super-smart and does not have any Mary Sue qualities. She's ordinary (except for the whole another-world thing).

    Second thing: This SI does not fall in love in any of the Death Note characters and her stay in the DN world isn't fun and roses at all. Things are actually quite hard for her.

    Third thing: The story is actually written quite well, so give it a chance.

    The fact that Light is also a big character in this story is a plus for me, because I always root for Kira to win.

    5/5
     
    Last edited: Nov 14, 2013
  2. Dark Minion

    Dark Minion Bright Henchman DLP Supporter Retired Staff

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    Moved based on the votes.
     
  3. SmileOfTheKill

    SmileOfTheKill Magical Amber

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    This is dumb. There is no way to make a SI without it being dumb, and this proved it.

    I get it, she is super weak and can't escape. Maybe Light will chain her in the room and gag her so she couldn't escape. Wait...

    The hell doesn't she escape?

    Because hell, I didn't know about the magic binding television.

    Also this. It is obviously designed to be a story where the SI is randomly attached to Kira and it is bloody pointless. Death Note is the best when it is dumb and campy and plans upon plans are being made. This is just a love story to Kira.
     
    Last edited: Jan 19, 2014
  4. Republic

    Republic The Snow Queen ~ Prestige ~ DLP Supporter

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    Get this shit out of the Library please.
     
  5. Captain Trips

    Captain Trips High Inquisitor

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    I read the first chapter, and the main character seemed to be built to generate pity from the reader. That made me click the x, I can not stand those kind of characters. 1/5 from me.
     
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