Minion has the right of it. The story isn't that great, and the OP isn't nailing his introduction to the forum, but we've had worse stories and worse posts.

I started reading the story, and we'll see how far I get. Right now the plan is to add a brief commentary on the chapters as I read them, but I suspect I won't get to the end of this one unless I start skimming.

Chapter 1 - Could have been summarized into about two sentences, but instead the author decided to harp endlessly on Jasmine's over-the-top abuse. It's cliche, poorly written, and serves no purpose.

You can skip chapter 1, here's what you need to know: Harry is Girl!Harry and named Jasmine. The Dursleys abused her so much that she wanted to get away so bad that she magic'd herself to the Narutoverse. Only noted differences from canon!Harry are gender and the fact that Jasmine liked to read Mrs Figg's books, giving this Harry a taste for big words and vocabulary.

That in itself is fine, honestly. If you want to write a fic like this then the obvious thing to do is to stick Harry into Sakura's place on team 7, so I can see why the author chose Girl!Harry. I say it's obvious because Kakashi, Sasuke, and Naruto are all interesting and plot relevant from the start whereas Sakura was not.

So Chapter 1 is a stereotypically bad first chapter, but some authors struggle with first chapters and set-up. So I will keep going.

Chapter 2 isn't much better, but here we run into a problem that I can't just suspend or ignore.

Six year old Jasmine Potter is, well, six. But she reads like she's at least sixteen. That's a problem for me. Because either the author has decided that in addition to dropping Harry into the Narutoverse he needs to be both female and an absolute prodigy... or the author just can't write an doesn't realize it's a problem. I suspect the latter in this case.

For example, this is NOT the internal dialogue of an abused six year old Harry Potter:

That's the internal dialogue of an adult, or at least a teenager. TBH it reads like an SI fic, where an adult has died and been reincarnated as a small child... but that's not what this story is billed as. It's not just that paragraph either, it's rampant and consistent and drives me up the wall.

There's nothing wrong with a 1st person POV Harry Potter story, but in this case I think they'd have been better off sticking with third person. It would have let them avoid this particular issue altogether.

Anyway not a ton happens in Chapter 2. Basically Jasmine wakes up in a Konoha hospital and is visited by Inoichi, Shikaku, and the Sandaime. There's a minor language issue, but it's resolved quickly since Inoichi just reads her mind (and gets all her backstory easily) then touches her and sticks the language skills she needs directly into her brain.

It's another set-up chapter, in other words. Chapter 1 set up the HP parts and Chapter 2 set up the Naruto parts.

Onwards to chapter 3!

Where we start to see some semblance of things moving, but it's still not drawing me in. The Sandaime is a bit overly nice and helpful, but there could be reasons for that.

The horcrux (referred to as a 'thing' that crawled into her head) is apparently gone. Which leaves me to wonder what part of this character is actually Harry Potter?

He's female instead of male. Jasmine reads like an adult, a mature adult, when she's only six years old ('vocabulary from reading Mrs Figgs books' does not explain this). The horcrux (and presumably the Voldemort plot, since Harry traveled to a different dimension) is gone. There's probably not a Hogwarts or any magic, since it's a different dimension and Harry expressed a desire to learn jutsu. Harry Potter is now Nara Riko (Riko means Jasmine, apparently). This all happens pre-canon events, before Harry ever got a Hogwarts letter, so the canon character we're all familiar with doesn't exist yet and will grow up in a completely different world.

Shikaku is... decently done, though. And how he deals with the child suddenly in his care works for me. It's the first time I found the story to be worth reading, even if this part only edged up to a 3/5. He offers his hand, she refuses, and he says he'll carry her if she doesn't accept the offer. She does. Then he calmly points out signs and whatnot to help her sort through her new language skills.

...it doesn't make the story anything but 1/5 at this point, but it's enough to make me keep going.

But let's be honest, if the OP hadn't said he'd read it three times, I wouldn't have gotten this far. I'd have stopped halfway through chapter 1. But I'd hoped that whatever had made him read it that many times would make it somewhat engaging.

^Chapter 4 was somewhere in that, I forgot to mark it. Chapter 5... Harry/Riko wakes up in Konoha, and I'm hopeful that this chapter will start plot related events.

But I'm going to skim and stop writing so much, because I'm impatient.

Chapter 5 was settling into the Nara clan. Bonding with Shikaku, Yoshino, and Shikamaru. Nothing special. Felt like filler.

I keep forgetting that the main character is supposed to be Harry Potter in chapter 6. Not just because of the lack of HPverse, but because Riko doesn't read much like Harry. Sometimes I find things that remind me, like when Riko notices the looks that Naruto gets (which feels right, since Harry used to get those same looks).

BTW there was an A/N somewhere that implied Britain, Magic, and Hogwarts would factor into the story, but only in the third story?

Regardless I do feel the story got a little better once Naruto became an actual character around Chapter 7 even if they haven't interacted yet.

I'll probably skim the rest at a later date, but it didn't manage to hook me in the first 7 chapters, and they weren't short chapters. 2/5 overall. I'll post again if I think it gets significantly better, assuming that I get much further.

Edit: I did keep reading later, fwiw. End of Chapter 14 is team assignments, if anyone wanted to skip to that.

Mostly what happened in the mean time is that Riko!Harry and Naruto are best friends, Riko trains with Sasuke regularly but otherwise they don't interact, and Riko has fairly solid skills due to her mother's training. The friendship between Naruto and Riko!Harry is pretty cool/sweet, but that's the only thing that stood out to me as well done from chapters 7 through 14.

Edit2: First suspected hint of magic in Chapter 18, when one of Riko!Harry's water clones is noticed to be acting odd. Kakashi notes a different kind of chakra around it, and wonders if Riko!Harry might have some kind of bloodline.

...and so on. The story is slow, and not particularly good. But if you're really bored it might be a time waster, particularly if you started after Chapter 7 or so. Feels like a typical 'almost recommended' story to me. Not good enough to recommend, but once you get past the worst parts of it some parts are almost good.

Still not library worthy though, or not in my opinion. 2/5

 

Well, a lot of stories do have the same problem with writing small children. In some cases it's explained (like in an SI), and in some it's not as obvious (because of 3rd person).

Consider giving "A Personal Matter" by Orodruin a try. It's not a 5/5 story either, but it also has a version of Harry Potter entering the Narutoverse at around six years old. I'm fond of this one, however. You might not like it, but that's okay too. Different opinions for everyone!