Challenge #1 - Post Traumatic Stress Disorder

Summary:
Harry returns to Privet Drive after his fifth year at Hogwarts. Dudley, more commonly known as Big-D, is part of a local skin-head gang. As part of Dudley's initiation into this gang he has to kidnap Harry and help with the rape and beating of Harry before he becomes a member of the gang. Dudley does precisely this.

Harry is now emotionally fragile (i know many of you are groaning now) to such an extent that he is suffering from PTSD before returning to Hogwarts. Upon his return his relationships with everyone he knows (teachers, friends, family figures, enemy's, Voldemort) become greatly askew and at first people blame the death of Sirius, but things spiral out of control and from there the story is yours.

Rules:
-Dudley must participate in and perpetrate the rape and beating of Harry
-Rape scene must be included and at least rater R if not NC-17
-After the rape NO SLASH (ie Harry doesn't like boys after this)
-Harry must show physical and psychological symptoms of PTSD
-Ron and Hermione cannot be good friends with Harry
-Harry must have weakness brought out by an enemy (can be as meek as Draco or mighty as Voldemort)
-PSTD must go untreated to at least November
-Harry cannot become well adjusted later on, Harry is now broken and will always be broken ***IMPORNTANT ONE***

Suggestions:
-Symptoms of PTSD could include: memory loss, insomnia, aggressiveness, nightmares, hallucinations/seizures, twitches/nervous ticks, suicidal tendencies, heart/lung complications, even death.

-Although Harry can get extremely aggressive (say towards Hermione for letting comments slip about depression and Sirius) his world has been shattered in a way that few can handle and none can handle well; so if Malfoy were to mockingly drop a comment about Harry liking it in the ass, Harry would not defend himself he can cry, he can run away, he can ignore, but he cannot stand up for himself, to a comment like that he is vulnerable.

 

Let me be the one to break it to you. Its not very good at all.
First the plot idea is very weak as far as where the story will go. Next graphic slash rape scene, thats just nasty not many on this forum will care for it at all. After that you have meek!mild!Harry also not a big plus for this forum.

I suggest you get on your flame retardant suit and start running for the hills, your going to get toasted over this.

 

This is interesting. I've read many fics like this, but none of them were good. I'd take a crack at it myself, but I'm swamped with unfinished fics right now. I hope someone does it. You know, well. Probably won't happen, though.

 

I'm certain that you don't need to inspire authors with a formal challenge to find a fic like this. The thing is, the groaning doesn't end. It's about as incompatible to DLP as it gets. In my own opinion, slash is slash. What author writes in a male/male rape scene that hasn't written slash? If an author wants to shatter Harry's self-esteem, they have him abused. There's no plot, which is an obvious one. Is there something else to this challenge, aside from baiting the users on the forum?

 

what point does this serve? This is as bad as the rainman harry challenge a couple years ago.

you fail

madeyemoody

 

Ask Kinsfire. He'd be so up for this.

 

Just admit it to yourself.

It's not the PTSD you want. It's the M/M.

http://www.healthyplace.com/Communities/Gender/gayisok/index.html

And FYI: Why the hell would a skinhead gang require the rape of another male? That makes -no- sense. At all.

Go back and hide under that dark rock you crawled out of.

 

All the bashing and pointing at the forum's title aside, my question is this: Why is this presented as a Harry Potter fanfiction?

Why does this idea require Hogwarts, wands, spells, potions, Voldemort, creatures etc... magical world in general?

If you're interested in stuff like this, you should probably go to wristcuttersunited.com and post the idea there as a basis for a regular short story, where a normal average kid named Nick gets raped and has to suffer through the consequences, while dealing with his dysfunctional family, uncaring school system, immature friends and other ordinary, mundane, non-magical, non-Harry Potter stuff.

If you said there's some sort of magical change as a consequence of the rape, that would have been an entirely different thing. Not better, mind you; just different.

 

This is lawlzy. I sense much bashing in the future. Did you even bother to lurk before joining this place?

That aside, I would like to ask what the inspiration was for you to come up with an idea such as this?

 

Let's take a look at your challenge shall we?

First, we'll look at Post-traumatic Stress Disorder. Now that we know what we're dealing with we'll take a look further into your challenge.

Setting aside the issue of your posting a challenge with this summary on the DLP forums; we'll focus on the summary itself.

First, why would Dudley want to join a skin-head gang? Due to the fact that there is no basis in canon for this you've obviously decided to start a rather drastic AU. That would normally be fine, but we'd need to understand how and why Dudley would want to join said gang.

Maybe we should learn more about Skinhead's before we can move on.

Okay, now as we can see there are different types of Skinhead groups. What is the nature of the group Dudley is joining? Why would they want to rape and beat Harry who is by all appearances a normal white middle-class male? If perhaps it was an anti-racist Skinhead group and Dudley told them Harry was a racist the beating portion would fit, but again we're left with far more questions than your summary answers.

Let's set aside issues of the gang and their initiation for now though. Instead we'll move on to Harry's reaction; or rather the lack there of.

You state that this fic begins after Harry's fifth year. In the years prior to your proposed fic Harry has:

1. Researched the mystery behind the Philosopher's Stone which lead to a meeting with the spectre of Voldemort. Harry, at age 11, survived multiple attempts on his life and ultimately facing his parent's murderer. He suffered no true Post-traumatic stress from this.
2. Researched the mystery behind the attacks on muggleborn students and the Chamber of Secrets. He dealt with the school as a whole thinking he was a Dark Wizard as well as the ever-growing threat of something attacking students. Ultimately he faced, once again, the spectre of Voldemort and also a 60ft. Basilisk. He nearly died due to his wounds from the battle, and nearly saw his best mate's sister die. To top everything off he confronted the man responsible for the year's events and bravely free'd the man's slave. He suffered no true Post-traumatic stress from this.
3. Survived a year of supposedly being targeted by a mass murderer. Later confronted said murderer, the true betrayer of his parents, a werewolf, and a horde of Dementors. Again, he suffered no true Post-traumatic stress.
4. Endured grueling tasks meant for wizards far older, the rebirth of Voldemort, an attempted murder by a Death Eater posing as his teacher, and again had no signs of PTSD.
5. Survived a year of Umbridge and the Ministries Machinations. Dementor attack, dream-visions, battle at the Ministry, Possession by Voldemort, and the revelation of the prophecy all failed to produce PTSD.

So after all that he not only allows Dudley of all people to kidnap him, but to rape and beat him. Then, after everything in his life that he has come through without suffering PTSD this event does him in. Right. I hope you can see now where the very essence of your challenge is flawed.

I could go through here and detail the problems with your rules and what-not, but I think you can see where I'm going without that. You've basically made a challenge where Harry is an unstable idiot and that after surviving threats a 100x greater than DUDLEY, he suddenly crumbles like a bitch.

In conclusion,

Pull your head out of your ass before you make another post a like this one. If you're a 12 year old fangirl that wants to see emo!rapevictim!Harry go elsewhere. If you want to read or propose a real story with a plot then trash this and take some time to consider where you went wrong.

 

Agreed one hundred percent. I hate fics that could very well be muggle!fics and no one would notice.

Seriously... skinhead gangs are usually homophobic at best, gay-haters at worst. They wouldn't require homo-rape as an entrance fee.

Oh, and Dudley's dick is too small to cause any damage as it cannot escape the confines of his fat, so your whole concept is moot.

 

Have you seen the movie American History X? That's what a skinhead is. Next time do a bit of research on your challange before you post it, or you could just not post another.

Ahhh, the good 'ol Pope has something to tell you!

 

You're asking someone on DLP to write an NC-17 Dudley/Harry, rape fic, with Dom!Dudley, Pussy!Harry, Non Con etc etc etc?

You're really asking that?

How sad. How very very sad.

 

Yes, because taking it up the arse from Dudley is the ONLY way that he'd be shell shocked after 5th year.

 

Ayup.

 

This thread sucks. Let's change the challenge and make this thread good good.

In fifth year, four Gryf girls, and two Slytherin girls tie Harry up in the room of requirement and rape him one by one, on Dumbledore's order (power of love). Harry is now very shocked and of course he has pdst (sarcasm). How will this affect his life? How will he kill Voldemort?

Response:

(warning, while I have had sex before - rushed awkward sex, sure but sex nonetheless - I don't know if this lemon will be that good. Don't read if you don't want.)

***

The Power of Love

Hermoine Granger, Parvati Patil, Lavender Brown, Padma Patil, Daphne Greengrass, and Blaise Zabini stood outside the stone gargoyles of Dumbledore's office, each holding a hastily scrawled piece of parchment.

"What's this about? Do you know?" Hermoine asked when she caught sight of the other five girls.

They shrugged and shook their heads. "I don't know," said Blaise Zabini. She looked confused. "What does your notes say?"

"Please see me in my office as soon as possible for urgent business, Albus Dumbledore." Hermoine said. She had frizzled hair, brown eyes, and a frown on her face like she was working out an arthimency problem.

"Mine too," Padma said. She was an Indian girl, the twin of Parvati. She had long straight black hair, smooth flawless skin, and the most expressive brown eyes one could ever see. Parvati was the same way.

They all conformed that they got the same note. "Does anybody know the password?" asked Daphne. She had curly blonde hair that reached her shoulders, bright blue eyes on a freckled face and a massive bosom.

"Harry told me its some kind of candy." Hermoine said.

The others gave her jealous looks. "What?" She weakly asked.

"Chocolate frogs," Blaise said to the gargoyles. They swung open with a creak. There was a staircase that looked gloomy and scary. Hermoine led the way.

"Come in girls," Dumbledore called out. They all entered and took a seat, examining the room in awe. None of them had been in here before.

"Now, girls, do you know what this is?" Dumbledore said, pointing to a rather large bowl filled with silvery liquid.

"A pensieve!" exclaimed Hermione. "I've seen this before in the catalog of-"

"Precisely," said Dumbledore. "I have an important memory to show you."

He showed them the prophecy. They looked awed after they had seen it.

"Harry Potter has to kill Voldemort?" She asked. "Why are you telling me this? You know my family is death eaters-" She immedaietly clapped her hands on her mouth.

"I know," Dumbledore said. "Believe me, however I look, I'm not dense."

"No, of course not," Blaise said, blushing hard. "I didn't mean to imply-"

"Don't worry about it," said Dumbledore.

"I called you here for a very special reason," continued Dumbledore. "You see, I know what this unknown power is."

"Really?" Hermoine exclaimed. "But I thought prophecies were very vague."

"No, I know the unknown power. It's love. Voldemort's power comes from hate. Harry's power comes from love, something that Voldemort knows nothing about. For example in the department of mysteries, where Voldemort was revealed to the world, he tried to possess Harry. Harry thought of his dead godfather and was able to kick Voldemort out."

"Amazing, he never told me about this," said Hermoine.

"What do you want with us?" asked Greengrass impatiently.

Dumbledore stood silent for one uncomfortable minute before he replied.

"Frankly my dears, I want you to activate Harry's power of love."

To be continued...

 

That is a story that deserves to be continued more than anything written for the original challenge.

 

You're a teenager. Six pretty classmates want to sex you up. Will ropes be required for you to comply? Still, please continue with the story.

Also:

Spot the /b/tard!

 

Now, that little segment has a number of problems with it that I saw. Firstly, Blaise Zabini is male. Second, its thoroughly stilted and rather boring. Thirdly, there is only one gargoyle. Next, you're Dumbledore is exceptionally out of character. And just in general...it sucks.

The revised challenge would only be any good at all if it was a devoted smut fic, of the order of Big D or old wolf. Nothing else would really work.

 

You're really beating up on this guy today... lol... but yes, it'd have to be a smut-fic. But who really hates smut fics? Especially twisted, teenage male written smut fics... always terribly written, always very lulzy