Great start. Grammar was good with only one spelling mistake (pessimestic) that I noticed. This story has promise. I'm looking forward to reading the next chapter.

 

I agree with Knothead. Great story, continue the good work and it will be above and beyond some of these other stories on this sight. Currently 5/5.

 

Well I stuck it on my alert list so I'll give a proper review after three chapters.

For now... I haven't read the Dresden Files but this vaguely makes me consider looking it up. It's a good story, well written and I like the background descriptions.

A few times we see Harry just raising his hand to put up a wandless shield... Where did this come from? And how did he cross over into Dresden-verse (or whatever you call it), was it because he followed the girl into the woods and she did some kind of fae woojiness we didn't see? And when did Harry become a clubbing people watcher?

That's why I give stories a couple chapters to really start up. Somethings get explained as backstory in later chapters, to add an air of mystique, and the first glance might make you think "who is this person and what does he have to do with Harry Potter?" So keep up the good work and I'll scrape up a star rating in a few chapters.

 

I liked it so far, but as I am only on Dresden Book 2 it was confusing. The grammar was good, and the plot from what little I have seen seems very good. It also seems that you have this mapped out which is always good. For the actually chapter I would say 4/5, but for the story I am going with the-Caitiff and waiting for more chapters.

 

Great story. Love it so far. An interesting read, for one chapter. But no judgement yet. So:

MOAR!!

 

Jon sucks at dota.

Luckily he compensates by being a fantastic author. 5/5 biatch.

 

EXCELLENT story! I've been keeping up with it in the 'Works by Author' Section
4.8/5

 

Twas' awesomesause.

Seriously though, nice update (even though I've seen most of it before). The parts you added were good, too.

Sorry I can't give a more intelligent review, but it's late, and I'm tired.

Though, I am curious as to when we'll see...May, was it? The sidhe again.

 

Beautiful. And long awaited. Thanks Jon.

 

I don't believe it. Abjuration has updated O.O I thought this was abandoned a loooong time ago.

Excellent chapter.

 

Nice Chapter.
To be truthful, I forgot completely about this fic.
With all these HP/Dresden crossovers around now a days, it is hard to find, ones that actually continue. I hope you do continue this fic, hopefully the next chapters will not take as long as this one did.
Good job.

 

Didn't you post parts of this before? If not all? This all seemed very familiar to me and I definitely remember the mold demons.
The only glaring mistake I noticed is that you kept calling Justine Justice.

 

Edit: never mind

 

Yeah I think I read all of that before, sort of fucked it up for me because I kept checking previous chapters to see if that hadn't already happened.

 

Man can't help but feel sorry for Beatrice. The vamps have obviously fucked her mentally at least. Is she a maid or a slave? Lol, Harry is so pussy whipped, he should just hurry up and bend over so all the male vamps and females with strap-on can use him and be done with it.

 

Beatrice is a slut and is undeserving of the awesomeness that is Harry. Harry/Lara or Harry/Inari please.

Nice story, you've got a good amount of the characterization down pat, but I'm still not feeling comfortable with Lara. Unless her being nice and stuff is all a ploy, it seems really out of character for her. Looking forward to seeing more of Dresden obviously, and Thomas is as brilliant as always.

I'm interested to see what you're going to do with Lord Raith and such. If it's all pre Blood Rites it could make for some awesome majoo.