Yeah...one point that got to me was the LEGO.

WTF? He's 16 years old...not counting the "2 years of Griphook training" that he got.

LEGO my ass.

 

I mentioned that in my review.

I was ignored. *sob* The unexpectancy! Lego's were fun, but I can't see anyone holding interest past 12 or so.

 

I suppose all the sappy stuff comes from being a Mom. This story is good but theres a bit to many Cons. She would have been a better author in a different kind of genre I think, not the Independent, Powerful Harry.


/Myst

 

I think the real mystery is why a mom is writing Fanfiction and making a Teenager independent

Mom+teenager+independent= WTF

 

Hey don't get me wrong...she writes manipulative Dumbledore really well. It's just a pity that the way she writes it, it takes hardly any effort for Harry to circumvent Dumbledore's manipulations.

If he only had to work for it, the story would be exponentially better.

 

Yes, the training scene actually reminded me of http://www.fanfiction.net/s/1907876/1/ (Once Upon a Freaking Time). It's weird that she spends so much time demonizing Dumbledore when he is so easy to get around.

 

Dear lordy, now it's just reading a train wreck wondering how bad this fic can get.

Furybolt son of Griphook. "I love you dad. You smell like goblin."

And this is an actual, serious line from chapter 15:

My goodness. Someone revoke her posting skills and fast. It's like an autopsy. I'm disgusted, revolted, feel ill, but I can't look away.

 

Nooo! You cut off the quote when it was most interesting! Did she say yes!? *shakes nonjon frenetically* DID SHE SAY YES!!??

 

eh... wow she pulled a stupid move with the story in chapter 25.


She made Harry's Animagus form.. a freaking ROBIN.


She kept preaching about inner-animal being like the real human... I dont see how os Harry a useless cowardly bird.

she contradicted herself in that stupid move. orginal yes, but it makes absolutely no sense.

 

Actually, with the way the story's been going, it makes perfect sense.

 

I hope that was a flame of sorts :lol:

 

This story seems to be in a runt. I mean it had a good start and then it just kept on building on how bad/evil/manipulative Dumbles for so long but nothing is happening about it.

 

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The last two chapters in my opinion were pretty good I've been following the story from the beginning and I think it has a lot of potential personally I like hearing how evil the headmaster really is it fits with my opinion of the headmaster. I don't think that the author should have brought Ron and his sister back into the fold. Ron and his sister make much better bad guys than most of the other characters.

 

I have to aggree with you, When the author started haveing the characters start traing with the founders it seemed to me that they ran out of idea's. Now as far as the action goes I don't mind that it has really slowed down as long as the writer puts some effort to explain why he/she is slowing the action for a time.

 

This story has turned so ridiculous, that even evil!Dumbledore couldn't give me enough motivation to read the last 10 or so chapters.

I mean, in this story, the whole world would have been one flowery and happy place, with everyone holding hands and singing serenades, if it weren't for the evil old man Dumbledore controling everyone and making them misserable for his own petty amusement.

Reediming people by removing the influence of Dumbledore's little trinkets was interesting at first, but it got really old after dozen or so gray/evil characters turning all sweet, kind and mushy after removing Dumbledore's evil mind-controlling spells. Hell, I bet even Voldemort will turn out misunderstood kindhearted gentlemen, who was acting evil only because Dumbledore had charmed his stuffed snake toy named Sparky. Evil!Dumbledore can be fun, but hell, he's not the only bad person in the world.

I won't even go into all sorts of creatures being ultra powerful and wise, but hiding their abilities from weak, stupid and agressive wizards. The whole Lego fascination and general pussyness of pretty much everyone can't be overlooked too.

All in all, I gave up on this a while ago. Might read it when it's done, just to see how bad things could get (I can already see Harry and Voldemort playing with lego pieces as their final duel).

 

Same here. The turning point for me was when the foursome became the 'Founder'. Utter bull crap in my opinion. Its lost its magic and now trying to live on borrowed time. Plus its become too pink bunnie-ish for my taste.

 

Ihonestly loved this fic in it's initial stages...the idea wasn't the most original, but it was nicely done. Incorprating a real exploration of different magics was nice, i guess.

I should have realized from about chapter 3, or whenever Harry becomes err...intimate with Griphook, that this would develop into a shitstorm of Pussy!Harry.

Now, she's been churning out chapters EVERY DAY, which is remarkable. On the other hand, each chapter is progressively worse. In this latest chap, Number 32 as it stands, we see Harry's character butchered.

In the beginning, he sobs and weeps about hpow hard it is for him to actually KILL Voldemort...after all, the man is simply misguided, right? Right? But at the end of the chapter, not to mention the incredibly pretentious way that Harry talkes to Amelia Bones, Harry finds no problems in casting the Cruciatus on Voldemort through the scar-link!

WTF? Make a fucking choice, woman! Seeing this...pendulum between the different moods that she arbitrarily pulls out of the hat is getting annoying.

There's Lego...fairies (apparently powerful ones...another WTF moment), garden gnomes, and other assorted little creatures that are generally classified as household pests even by Rowling.

He also is a "Founderette!"...a ridiculously feminine title for a group of two men and two women. Idiot. He gets trained by the fouders, is generally insignificant as an animagus, and has a fucking mustache, a really gay one. He proposes to Herman before even kissing her...WTF?

I've honestly lost all hope in this fic...the least she oculd do now is end it decently. Being a soccer mom, though, i don't see a battle scene creating any great imact at her hands...perhaps a slight fizzle.

I staunchly defended it before, perhaps out of some sense of hope that this fic would return to the standards that i had thought it had, but to no avail.

I liked her Dumbeldore, but she failed there, too. To figure out Dumbledore's manipulations (another overused term in this fic), all Harry has to do is get out the popcorn and look at the portrait. Where's the fucking effort, dammit? With all this "charming for time-saving" that Lord Harry Furybolt James Potter Black, Heir of anyone significant, i don't doubt that he's no less than 35 years old now.

You know what? I'll end with a few succint words to describe my ire:

FUCKING MUSTACHE!!!!!! :twisted: :twisted: :twisted: :twisted:

 

I hadn't looked at this one in a while. And wow! It's been continuing merrily along the path it was clearly headed. The path to freaktown.

"Take it like a goblin, bitch!"

I can honestly say, that's a power Voldie probably knew not.

Are there people still enjoying this fic? Excuse me, let me clarify that. Are there people still enjoying this fic for the reasons I'm assuming the author intended?

I gave up around chapter five or so. By that point it seemed clear to me that the author was taking all the typical popular cliches, and by simply changing something small about them, suddenly assuming they wouldn't be cliche. My limited laughing with the fic turned into mocking laughter at it.

And yet it seems more and more popular each time I look. So I'm curious if anyone here at DLP is willing to tell me I'm an idiot and this fic is brilliant and why. Or has the limited interest the early chapters garnered been completely exhausted through bad writing, cliched crap, and an overall generic and uninteresting train wreck of a story?

 

All hail Nonjon, in all his glory!

Damn straight, man. Now, i would rant again, but i think my last post sums it up. I read the last thre chaps since that post, and GODDAMN!

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AAAAAAAAAGGGHHHH!!!

She done fucked up.

Dumbledore dies from a heart-attack? What an insipid, irritating, pathetic and utterly impotent way for her to kill him off!

Fuck...the only reason she did it this way is so that she wouldn't ahve to write the confrontation. This way, Dumbles lost ENTIRELY...since a 16 year old with a sudden realization that he's being manipulated entirely fucks the world over.

She took the easy, and bullshit way out, and i curse her for it. Thank god that she can at least write properly.

Still, she gets no less than 80 grossly flattering reviews per chapter...even when she updates twice a day for a week straight. Sure, one of those reviews came from me, since i actually saw her slavaging the story...but nope. Failure!

AAAAAAAAAAAAGGGHHHHHH!!!!!!!!!!!
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Err you might want to break out the

Spoiler

and [/_spoiler] tags (without the underscore).

I'd not actually known the fate of Dumbles having skipped straight to the chapter titled "The Final Battle"... and my little quote didn't feel like a spoiler without any known context, though I considered using it.