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WIP Harry Potter and the Natural 20 by Sir Poley - T

Discussion in 'The Alternates' started by Speakers, Nov 27, 2012.

  1. Photon

    Photon Order Member

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  2. Saot

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    I wouldn't go that far, but i don't really have any complaints about it other than that it's a plotline I'm thoroughly bored of that's not really related to the story's main plot.
     
  3. Tehan

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    For a story that could have quite easily coasted on munchkin jokes, snark and D&D references, he's doing some damn interesting things with the storyline. Highly enjoying this.
     
  4. D-Sloopo

    D-Sloopo Second Year

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    I don't like the muggle sub-plot the story has going on. I don't find it interesting in the least and the muggle characters are even less interesting. It's kind of ruined my enjoyment of the story actually.
     
  5. Knoq

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    It is, ironically, the only real weakness in the story. And I almost feel as if the author made a shout out, because I did a review mentioning the implications of the Imperio and the Disillusionment in tandem. To put it simply, that raid, and basically any SWAT-like raid, should have been a curbstomp. In the Wizard's favor. A nasty one too. Sure, gun fire is faster than spells, but there is no guarantee that bullets could or would penetrate Protego shields and such, nor is there any guarantee that the weapons can not be Accio'd.

    Not to mention the entire subplot revolves around Obliviators not making using of Legilimency, especially after apparent multiple instances. It isn't just a single over looked issue either, its repeated instances, bordering if not holding the Plot Induced Stupidity ball. For a fic half based on the humor of munchkining, it seems out of place and intentionally so. Making Magical MIB suddenly hold an incompetence ball is far out of place, especially since they apparently did their jobs perfectly well during the advent of Global Live Television and an open war in which one side was antagonistically being as reckless as possible just to strain the other more. Which yes, would be harder than today because today you could brush off a bunch of stuff as merely Hollywood special effects and nothing more.

    The only possible way it might work, is if Wizards are just assumed to be hilariously ignorant of Muggle-Everything, which, even if that applies to a general population of Wizards, should not be applied to people in charged of keeping an international edict in force. An International Edict mind, that I would bet many Wizarding nations would outright go to war over if it meant keeping enforced. And even before computers, we Muggles had this annoying tendency to document the ever living hell out of stuff, especially bureaucratic stuff, just to have redundant records. The presence of damning information doesn't change, merely its form and I would be shocked if Wizards hadn't developed magical means of finding and keeping track and erasing such information in the middle of coverups. If Wizards hand't managed to keep up with the leaps and bounds of information distribution and the speed of such that grew with orders of magnitude for the last two hundred years, they would have been fully exposed long ago.

    Hope this necro isn't too bad, I love this story, but this one glaring weakness in it just rustles my jimmies.
     
  6. tn5421

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    He doesn't have that world's magic, Arithmancy would not help him make HP spells. It might give him some ideas about how to modify his own spells, however.

    Milo's characterization is the only big negative I see about this story so far.
    3.75/5
     
  7. ledballoon

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    Milo is a Munchkin. In gaming, a munchkin is a player who plays what is intended to be a non-competitive game (usually a role-playing game) in an aggressively competitive manner. A munchkin seeks within the context of the game to amass the greatest power, score the most "kills", and grab the most loot, no matter how detrimental their actions are to role-playing, the storyline, fairness, teamwork, or the other players' enjoyment. The term is used almost exclusively as a pejorative and frequently is used in reference to powergamers.

    Milo is a Fantastic representation of a Munchkin, and a great character.

    This is a lighthearted, funny story that respectfully crosses over two incompatible worlds beautifully.

    A very enjoyable read.
     
  8. CheddarTrek

    CheddarTrek Set Phasers to Melt Moderator DLP Supporter

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    I'd almost forgotten about this story, but just the other day someone on IRC was looking for a fic that combined gaming with HP. This isn't a traditional "The Gamer" example, but it's still a solid one.

    Also I learned something. I didn't know that about the term Munchkin.

    Tempted to re-read it, but eh. Anyone know how it holds up for a second read through?
     
  9. theronin

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    I think it holds up pretty well. I'm still holding out hope that the author will pick this up again. It's a lot of fun, and I think the fact that the author managed to tell a story about a character who is actively trying to become overpowered by essentially cheating (and rules lawyering) without turning it into a stompfest is remarkable. The plot twist with the diary in particular sticks out to me as a great example of that.
     
  10. Rhaegar I

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    Overall, I'm a fan of it. I didn't really like the muggle cop subplot, but it was still an entertaining story.
     
  11. gamarad

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    It updated. It's been more than 2 and a half years since the last chapter so I'm going to reread before reading the current chapter.