He has a point you know.

Anyway, I could just about stomach this story up until he made swords for all his happy little friends. I kinda got pissed at the vampire bonding thing but I just told myself it would get better. Unfortunatly it had already steped on the path to the dark side and there was super high walls around it that stopped it coming back into the light. Oh well.

 

This is starting to be a bigger Stained Future than Stained Future.

 

The fic is on hold now because

He (or she?) made the same mistake as several other super.Harry authors. He had stuffed Harry with everything possible, had him decimate nearly all of Voldemort's followers and now the only thing that remains is getting rid of snakeface and then Dumbledork. And with the powers he already demonstrated that should need just a swish and flick and that doesn't seem to be an adequate ending for the story.

I started to read the story early. I continued only because I liked some of the Dumbledork and Molly Weasley scenes. But it became more and more unbelievable and partly downright riddikulus. The twisted timeframe, the Vampires and Elves powers, and so on. It's the same with most superpower stories - to create the next climax even more powers or abilities are added, which is unbelievable. That is the reason I don't like superpower stories.

It is somehow sad. He only needs two or three more chapters and could finish the story with a decent ending. As he has started two new stories (one he has already begun to publish) I assume we'll have to wait very long before this one will be finished.

 

It has been updated with at least 2 chapters, describing some sort of 'second-last' battle, disabling Voldemort for the near future and some normality for wizarding Britain.

It's meh. If you weren't riveted on the story before, you certainly aren't now.

 

This is pretty bad. Aside from the fundamental mistake of giving Harry superpowers galore, the author constantly slips in invalid pop culture references. Seriously, Blue Collar TV? Harry being a guitar prodigy? It's things like that serve to strip a fic of all enjoyability.

 

Ahem...

My review to the Author in chapter 7

Ok... This story had a lot of potential and honestly was going somewhere. But after 7 chapters my head is spinning. There is such a thing as too much power you know. You've made Harry part elf, descendants to two Founders, immune to all but the deadliest of poisons, blood kin to the oldest clan of vampires in the world, able to do parsel magic, have a time turner that enables him to live a year within a month and now he has a phoenix for a familiar? It's just too much.

I know that you claim that you don't care what people say about your story, but this is getting a little old. Having him be the most powerful human in the universe even more powerful than the Founders, kinda takes the point of having a battle away doesn't it. I mean Riddle doesn't even stand a breath of a chance does he? At least make it interesting. The three elder animals was a nice touch however as was his innuendo with the flight attendants. Spelling and grammar are fine as is overall progression of the characters. So all in all it's not a bad fic. Quite the contrary , actually. Just reign it in a little.

There's no excitement if Harry can just go back in time a week and save whoever dies in battle. Here's hoping you don't give up on the story and that the chapters to come have some interesting plot.




And after 8 more chapters of that crap I posted this in the review section



ok wow...enough with the Simple plan already. We get it. Your obviously an obsessed teenage girl. Or a rather pathetic fanfic author. Find a new band to worship.

On another note, it's spelled ado.

Finally this fic isn't half bad, since you finally got to the M rating which you have filed it under. As well as the Multi relationship. I was afraid that the romance was that just fodder for you to suck people in to have us read how Super!Harry gets all emo and has this amazing ability with a guitar that the first time he picks it up with three other random people Simple Plan just flies out of him. Seriously 15 chapters out of 23 is pretty sad to start making a harem. There's no development, no order of things or other details that need to get hammered out when a harem gets formed. It goes from a Simple Plan concert at Hogwarts to all three women giving up their virginity to Harry in just two short paragraphs.

As for me? I'm off to the story you recommended a few chapters back. I'm a big fan of Dumbles bashing and hopefully their story won't have a ridiculously super Harry with two parts magical creature one part Mortal Kombat and one part emo.

I had hope in chapter 7 when I reviewed. Clearly you let me down. I know you don't care and will probably dismiss this as a flame. It's constructive criticism with no curse words or personal insults and mostly correct spelling and grammar. It's also the truth. It may be harsh but you'll just have to accept the fact that Simple plan isn't the greatest band in the world. And Harry isn't super powered seven ways from Sunday.







Pretty much sums up my feelings for this fic

 

I just read tthe first chapter and i am astounded at the detail the writer puts into their writhig.

somebody tell me if i spelt "astounded" correctly

 

You did spell astounded correctly. But on behalf of writers everywhere, leave the 'writhing' to your mom.

Here's a helpful picture for you as well:

 

My bad i just got this new laptop and not only is the feeling different i was typing in the dark half drunk. So while i appreciate the advice i am not a "fucking idiot" as you so eloquently put it. Plus seeing as i don't ``Go Advanced`` i usually just post a quick reply so ease up on the hostility

 

Half drunk really is no excuse, but I will leave that for the mods to figure out. Ironically enough, nonjon is a mod. He is just trying to give some friendly advice..

Anyway, back on topic. I can't believe that I use to like reading this story when it first came out. I thought it was the greatest shit since white bread, until I went back to read it.

*shakes head*
Why was my standards so low back then?

3/5 Only because I still remember it fondly. Even if I can't seem to stomach it any more.

 

Just because you didn't know better. At least that's my explanation or excuse for enjoying it back then. I hadn't read many indy!Harries or super!Harries before, so I thought his ideas were interesting and exciting. In 2005 a lot of it wasn't overly used yet, so it was still enjoyable to read about an average manipulative!Dumbledore.

Meanwhile I've read numerous stories performing the same tasks way better and even more stories like this one, forming the once original ideas into (mostly bad) clichés.

So nowadays I suggest to trash bin this fic instead of putting it on display in the library.



EDIT: Of course, if you're half drunk almost all fanfics tend to be brilliant pieces of literature.

 

I dont really like fics where Harry suddenly goes "teenage witch" and gets a laptop, mobile phone, blackberry etc,............ and what's with the rockstar Harry bit? Next he'l be advertising pepsi and watching "Life as we know it".

The fic itself was barely passable, Harry travels the world, bonds with a vampire, has an elven city licking his boots and becomes some sort of demi god prophet.

Oh and what the fuck is with all the shiny swords?

 

Get it out of the library.

 

I am mixed about moving this story from the library.
It would not make it in today, but got in when standards where different.
But, the new year is coming, maybe a new sections should be set up in the library, and a little resorting maybe? Maybe Not?

 

I actually like this idea. So many stories that where the shit back in the day, just don't seem to cut it in today's community. We can call it "Once Upon a Time" or O.U.T for short. Stories that explored strange new territory, boldly going where no fanfic had went before.

The only problem I see with this would be the lack of stories to actually put in there.

 

I'm not so sure about it... all someone would have to do is to check which stories were good "once upon a time" (or were in favorities) and gather them all in a new section...

There is only one slight problem... the sheer amount of stories we've got in the library...

 

This is the sort of thing that makes Baby Jesus cry.

1/5, and turf it out of the library.

 

0/5.

People ask what to avoid when writing fics, but now we don't have to wrack our minds for the answer.

Now, all we have to do is point to this mishappen piece of shit and say "Just avoid this, and your story might be crap, instead of decaying shit."

The chapters are long, but that isn't a point in the favor of the story when the writing style in which they are written in is bland - at best- if not just overencumbered and generally very low-level writing.

I can't imagine this ever being considered good- in any age. Forget Once Upon a Time fic, even in the years ago if was written, I can't see what charm it has.

Writing styles transcend whether ideas are obsolete, and I can only wonder why this guy doesn't feel any shame.

Every character the author likes is superpowered. And I think Ron got a nymphs bonded to him.

...

I could go on, so I will.

Dumbledore exists specifically so that he gets his ass handed to him repeatedly. There's no conflict.

The encounters are just corny when they aren't completely illogical. I want to grab the author by the throat and say "Don't you ever toss off another action one-liner again."

For example, Harry's on a mountain hike and comes across a dragon fighting a bunch of goblins. If I remember correctly, a quartet of mythical creatures descend from the heavens like Chuck Noris without his shirt and thank him graciously.

The treatment for what would otherwise be an epic scene in hands of a competent writer is embarrassingly feeble.

I can appreciate the author trying to expand the scope, but not when the story's a cheap knockoff attempt at joe6991's works by emulating the broader horizons and epic scale.

The fantasy elements truly makes me suspect that this is the author's idea of a joke, and this is a massive parody. If this turns out to be a "Potter Tradition of Red"esque story, then consider my rating 2/5 because even then, satire is nothing when storytelling is sacrificed for it.

Everything sucks. The less I skim the more horrified I become. Not a good converse relationship to have associated with a story.

 

How the fuck did this make it into the library?

 

1/5, to kill it.

Put it in the bin, nao!