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Complete No Antidote by FalconPain - T - Pokemon

Discussion in 'Anime, Cartoons, and Comics' started by Stealthy, May 11, 2018.

  1. Stealthy

    Stealthy Groundskeeper

    Feb 21, 2014
    Title: No Antidote
    Author: FalconPain
    Rating: T
    Genre: Tragedy/Adventure
    Status: Complete
    Fandom: Pokemon
    Summary: Bulbasaur and his trainer had an agreement: they would make it to the Pokémon League, or go down trying. So even when faced with utter tragedy, he decides that he and his trainer will live up to their promise. By any means necessary.

    Link: Ffn

    So, this fic came back into my mind recently, and I was surprised as hell to see it wasn't already here. I first read it most of a decade ago, must've been 2010-2012 or so, and it mostly holds up.

    Premise is that Marty - the trainer - gets poisoned by a Beedrill and is given a time limit on life. They go back on the pokemon journey anyway, with the goal of getting as far as they can, and the fic takes Marty's condition damn seriously.

    The story is told from the perspective of the Bulbasaur, rather than the trainer, and humans are given rather short shrift throughout. Generally that makes me hesitant because it's often a red flag, but it works here, and the fic just flat out fails otherwise.

    The Pokemon are solid characters, with their own motivations, personalities, and voice. Bulbasaur's got the right balance of naivete to him, where he's clearly inexperienced but not immature. More impressive is that the author made Bulbasaur's voice and personality distinct from Marty's second pokemon, who's rather innocent. If you can make naive and innocent sound different from each other, you've got a leg up on most fanfic writers when it comes to characters.
    Ekans is another good example. I'm sure there's some YMMV on tolerating him, but there's well done undercurrent of bitter fear to him behind the arrogance and abrasiveness.

    The plotting comes full circle in a fairly intelligent way. Author has a point. They know it, and they strike it. And they know damn well what genre they're writing, and they don't bitch out when it counts. This isn't one of those not-so-sob stories where Marty's illness is an inconvenient presence that doesn't stop him from ultimately succeeding. Marty's condition is serious, and it's treated as such. This is a tragedy. And the story understands how to make it progress and slowly escalate until it comes to its final end. I think it spins its wheels a bit past the halfway point, but goddamn does it stick the landing.

    Will say, the part after Marty dies with the ghost trainers and whatnot is a let down, but not enough to really hurt the fic. Marty's death is still great.

    Ask me whenever I first read it all those years ago and I'd have given it an easy 5, and I'm still kinda tempted. A few things grate on me more than they used to. Nevertheless, the core of the story remains damn good. It's a well-written tragedy that doesn't pull its punches but doesn't get too melodramatic, and ain't that a nice thing to find.

    4.5/5, rounding down.
  2. Zombie

    Zombie Black Philip Moderator DLP Supporter

    Apr 28, 2007
    So, I don't normally read Pokemon, but as I was cleaning up around here, I saw that this didn't have a review. Decided to give it a good read through to see if it merited the rating that OP gave it.

    Generally speaking, I didn't know what to expect from this. The OP states that the other pokemon have their own voice and personalities and motivations. I didn't really expect to like it, considering that that many perspectives would make reading confusing, but this actually seemed to work.

    The plotting wasn't bad. I liked how the story unfolded and the fact that it was told from Bulbasaur's perspective was kind of interesting, to a degree. I kinda of kept reading this because it was like watching a train wreck. I kept expecting something more to happen and it didn't.

    My own personal rating is a 3/5.
  3. Otters

    Otters DA Member ~ Prestige ~ DLP Supporter

    Jun 8, 2010
    High Score:
    This was a fun idea, but was squandered by a lack of flair. The voices of the pokemon talking to each other reminded me far too much of dialogue in an overly childish cartoon, so maybe it's accurate, but it wasn't fun to read. When Bulbasaur confronted Beedrill later on, especially, I was cringing hard.

    The writing was uninspired - not actively bad, but utterly devoid of style. The syntax was erratic, and the author has a hard-on for ellipses which I found insufferable. Along with that, the protagonist being called Marty kept getting this stuck in my head:

    Overall this wasn't awful, but does feel geared towards a younger audience. Because of the nature of the fandom, I'd call this Almost Recommended.