I managed to read through it- my eyes burned the whole way but I wanted to do a proper review- for those who haven't read it, Harry uses Parseltounge without knowing it, freaking everyone out, Mrs. Black worships him basically from then on, thus Kreacher does, Harry and Sirius say to everyone that they can use magic there, Molly and Hermione yell at him for breaking the law, Snape's suspicious of him and notices he's doing monthly dark magic rituals - during the full moon - to increase his power, Harry has an inner hollow - well, not quite, but a darkside talking to him, like in the Grey Maiden series - and he passes out like twice a chapter from panic attacks.

0.5/5

Also, about that username, how do you even log in with it? As I would hate to have to go and find all those characters everytime I wanted to log in here...

 

Holy sweet jesus your a bit of a stalker aren't you? To answer your question no I am not the author. I just read this story for the first time the other day and felt like posting it. Trust me, If I ever wrote a story I would never post it on here, not to mention it's against the rules for the author of a story to post it up himself for review on here. Least I'm pretty sure it is.

But seriously you must of have better things to do then stalk my facebook.

Edit::: Shouldn't say to answer your question as you actually were just thinking and assuming in a post, but I answered your theories anyways :]

 

No it isn't, I do it all the time.

 

Yes, but your stories being in "For Review" before being added to the library seems to be a formality at this point...

 

If you want to look at it that way. It literally took 30 seconds to find that dude. I'm not even close to the most proficient internet stalker on DLP. I can't do shit beyond basic common knowledge. If you don't want people looking at your facebook, don't use the same, public e-mail for both DLP and FB. That's so easy to follow it doesn't even qualify as stalking.

 

If you link a email address to FF.net, you can copy that to facebook, ditto with any other website people have access to an email address, ect.

 

The heavy usage of nicknames and brackets/parentheses in this story are killing me. The brackets seemed to tapper off as chapter 1 went on so that can only be a good thing. The extra inane commentary is annoying.

I was a bit confused why Cedric's death bothered him at all if he plans on killing the Dursleys and is 'acting' for everyone else. If there was a reason, I must have skimmed over it.

I might give it another try later, but the situations from canon with the added sarcasm just seem to clash.

 

The reason is that he saw that the first Hogwarts letter said "The Cupboard under the stairs" and decided the Wizarding World must not give a damn about him.

 

2/5. I was less than amused and couldn't force myself to make it into the second chapter. This was fail all the way around. I'm pretty sure I've seen the exact same dialogue in another fic and that one sucked donkey schlong too.

As for the stalker accusation...it's so easy it isn't funny to block the fb search engine from showing random people from finding you. Always a good thing when you have ex's and/or might or might not be less than enamored of the idea that random people can find you lol

 

I suppose I'm questioning why he has nightmares about Cedric at all, if he figures the Wizarding World does not give a damn about him. So as far as I can tell, he's either projecting himself on Diggory or the author really wanted to stick with the canon scenes, even if would have been better to have him respond differently. I'm going with the second one here.

 

I am sorry; I got about four lines in to the actual thing before first shaking my head. With Harry's "wait for it line". It, quite simply is not funny and as I read on Harry's sarcastic nature and believability just became more and more grating. How is an eleven year old child not supposed to know the difference between a half-giant and a giant and yet already be more skilled at magic than anyone and be able to instantly understand what one could consider the "true nature" of everyone around him? We are supposed to believe that? Nope sorry, I can't do that.

The story seems to serve little point, Harry's comments, if he's following Canon should not be directed at those events but how he intends to do whatever he intends to do. Overall, I could just not get into this story.

1/5

 

Read up to 5th chapter and fall asleep, 1/5, one for I had nice dream

 

This story reads like the author is attempting to make Harry an 'awesome' sociopath with 'super cool' sadistic tendencies, as well as a 'badass' unrepentant dick.

Except that the author doesn't have a decent enough grasp of psychology to make that characterization interesting at all, and fails horribly at trying. Instead of Harry actually being a genius/actor/sociopath, we get a Harry that sounds like... Well, a fifteen year old girl that thinks that stuff would be awesome.

:facepalm/10

 

This describes 90% of all Dark!Harry fics.

And about 40% of the Indy! ones.

 

I kind of thing that the more immediate problem is the lack of any writing ability whatsoever.

Just another 1/5 fic.

 

It gets slightly better as you progress through the fic, but it's clear that no matter what the author does, it'll never get past 3/5, simply because a lot of themes are just so cliché and badly done. As it is now, maybe a 2/5, with the caveat that there are some interesting ideas.

 

I know that I probably should have stuck through reading this trash and doing a proper review. That said I managed to get half way into the first chapter when the pain in my eyes became so unbearable I could no longer stand it.

I give this a FAIL/5 for being absolute shit. It may have been a 1/5 back in 2003 but that was Eight Years Ago.