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Discussion in 'The Alternates' started by Lindsey, Jul 23, 2018.

  1. Anarchy

    Anarchy Half-Blood Prince DLP Supporter

    Dec 12, 2009
    Alright, so I'm not usually one to defend a fic. People can rate it however they want. Hell, I drop fics all the time for any random reason. But I really think you didn't give this one a fair shake. Firstly, it's a fic starting first year, so abandoning it before it even gets to Hogwarts is a bit dramatic. I get that the idea of saying "the story gets better later on" is a bit cliche, but we're seriously talking about two chapters before Harry is on the Hogwarts Express. No one should expect the hook for this kind of story to happen in the pre-Hogwarts stuff. It's all just setup, and it's mostly forgettable. That's not exactly a crime, since it's a first year fic and no one wants to read 50k words of a shopping trip. Really, the only complaint I have about the early stuff is Quirrell is just a gigantic Mary Sue, and not nearly as interesting as the author thinks she is. The rest is stuff, that even if I don't like the concept of, I can acknowledge that the author has an idea of what they're doing with their worldbuilding, such as with the banking stuff.

    The writing early on isn't that bad either. It's not like the author simply ran his native language through google translate. There's not even that many spelling mistakes. The main issue I saw is that the conversations felt like aliens talking to each other in simulated English, rather than actual people, but that does improve pretty quickly (as Lindsey says she's become the beta writer since then), though I won't say it becomes a masterpiece or anything.
  2. Villanelle

    Villanelle Groundskeeper

    Jun 30, 2017
    High Score:
    Right. Did the point of divergence need to have been this far in the past for things to pan out the way they have? Doesn’t really seem like it, save for little hints which don’t appear to be anything more than background world building.

    Having said that, first year isn’t over yet and who knows, maybe we’ll discover more changes to what we know as the wizarding world, but so far the changes seem rather superficial and similar results could’ve been obtained with either Dumbledore or Tom making different choices sometime before 1945.
  3. TheLazyReader

    TheLazyReader Groundskeeper

    Feb 9, 2018
    I've read this a couple months ago when Sesc recommended it in a thread about the best fics of 2017. My general sentiment about it is that he was completely right. It's new, it's fresh, and it feels like Harry Potter in a fandom that only slips away from it.

    The weakest point of the fanfic is the slow and roughish start. The first four chapters, despite building the world nicely and leaving us excited to learn more about it, borrow heavily from canon. It feels almost like the author was learning to walk. After that, almost everything flows nicely and manage to stand on its own. Harry's integration in Hogwarts is not rushed and his involvement with Quirrell (Voldemort?) is dealt with in a nice pace. And recent chapters have delivered reveals I wasn't expecting at all. It seems the mystery is really about what happened to Harry's parents during the war.

    I really didn't see the wooden dialogue some spoke of. Harry's interactions with his friends and would-be friends are good and feel like children talking to children. Ron seems to have a bit more complex character here, and Hermione obsession with mysteries is a nice flavor to her obsession with books. Daphne is not completely original but does have a good execution. She's outright unpleasant at first instead of the cliched cold persona, and that warrants at least an Exceeds Expectations in my book.

    Quirrell though is the selling point of this fic. Fun, charming, and manipulative as balls. It's easy to like her and forget she's most likely evil. If she's really Voldemort I'm okay with it. If she isn't and remains as Harry's master I'm okay with it too.

    World building is great. I especially liked turning Hagrid into a world-famous creatures specialist. His basement and its caretaker (another good character) are interesting, along with the creatures. I really did not mind the snakes because of the fable-like feeling they added to the story, keeping the children's book quality of the original HP. However, I'm really interested in why this story is integrated with Arthurian legends. I think this hasn't really been addressed yet. The Civil War and the ruptured Britain stuff is also something to look forward to. It feels like more than what an eleven-year-old can comprehend is involved in that.

    TLDR: It's an interesting new take on the world of Harry Potter with fun characters, fun interactions, and a captivating (probably) villain.

    Very hopeful 5/5 because it manages to find the roots the fandom has long abandoned.
    Last edited: Aug 11, 2018
  4. Sesc

    Sesc Slytherin at Heart Moderator

    Dec 20, 2007
    Blocksberg, Germany
    I only skimmed the last updates b/c time, which annoys me, because this story deserves more.

    Anyway, though, I will say that if
    "Definitely," said Ron. "And if Voldemort... well... did them in, it must mean they weren't one of his Dark Wizards, not really."

    Harry smiled. Ron's logic was flawless. If Voldemort was a dark wizard, and Harry was sure he had been one, it made sense that his parents would disagree with him once they found out.

    "Of course!" Harry exclaimed, wincing when a grunt came Neville's bed. He continued in a lower voice. "You're a genius, Ron! That's why he killed them! They tried to run away from him, and if he was as dark as people say there's no way he'd let them."

    "That must have been it," replied Ron, puffing out his chest and smiling to himself. "Everyone says those Death Eaters of his were more of a cult than anything. They probably didn't want to be part of it."

    It was like an invisible weight had been lifted off Harry's chest. He breathed easier, and his throat loosened.
    is what is is, and is all that is, my disappointment will reach outer space and I will rate this 1/5 out of spite.

    At the same time, I don't feel the author would do that. To create such a world, and then not play in the twilight, in inner conflicts, flaws, doubts, ambiguous motivations, would be the waste of the century. So I'm rather hopeful Harry is setting himself up for a disappointment-and-growth arc here, and his (and Ron's) logic is a flawless and well-done expression of their age (instead of reflecting the author's age, see: every Indy fic ever). And bonus points for Slytherin!Lily. Now take that setup and make me proud.

    Edit: Also, rofl @FF.net reviews. But considering the existing undertones (intentionally or not), you can't exactly blame them -- someone was bound to write this. Of the suggested options, I think the steamy centaur sexromance has the most potential /s
  5. theimmortalhp

    theimmortalhp Second Year

    Mar 22, 2015
    I definitely got the impression from reading that part and other backstory that we get of Harry's parents that he's going to be disappointed on this count. Though the degree I'm not sure on.
  6. Microwave

    Microwave Professor

    Oct 21, 2017
    coronavirus quarantine
    I wouldn't mind if that were the case. I think a lot of the charm of the story comes from the fact that Harry is overshadowed by all of his peers.
  7. Lindsey

    Lindsey Minister of Magic DLP Supporter

    Dec 1, 2010
    Seattle, WA
  8. Xion

    Xion Robot Overlord Admin

    Apr 3, 2006
    Old Blood has been updated with a new chapter.

    Story Stats
    Chapters: 15
    Words: 106,629
    Updated: 2020-07-23 18:39:48 UTC
    Published: 2017-03-24 03:26:08 UTC
    Previously updated: over 1 year ago

    Brought to you by Scryer story thread updates.
  9. neongreenbeast

    neongreenbeast First Year

    Jan 5, 2015
    The author sure as shit delivered in the latest chapter. Even after all the speculation about Lily and James' history with Voldemort, this reveal was completely unexpected.

    A bit disappointed with Quirrel's fate though. With all the focus on changing the character's gender, the final plotline could have diverged from canon a bit more. Assuming there's another plot twist coming, but seems unlikely.
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