Dark Fucking Harry "(He was unaware of the double meaning in his words, that this was the lesson the Prodigal had taught him. That every new beginning meant the end of something. If he had, Harry would have been aware of his own slow ruin, and fled; because cowards make poor heroes.) " This felt a bit clumsy. And it made it unclear later on when you did the italicized thing regarding portraits. "When did all his friends become portraits." I wasn't sure if this was a 3rd person omniscient narrator, or what, and then later you did that bit where Harry recites what he knows so far, "Hogwarts, Gringotts" etc. Also, it took me a couple of readings to get that Dumbledore was distracted by Draco, thus allowing Harry to get the jump on him. I don't know if I was slow on the uptake on this one, or if it genuinely wasn't clear (with the intercutting). Anyway, my first thought was that Harry could not take Albus unless there was some sort of disadvantage. Once, I realized he was distracted by Draco. Thus my next question was Albus Dumbledore can be so easily ambushed, if you just sneak up behind him silently? Why did Albus not notice Draco there? He didn't sense him or something? This part was a bit of a stretch. It could be thrown up to Destiny, but I don't like doing that. Destiny works more subtly I'd think... I'll admit also, I was surprised that Harry killed Albus. I expected Albus to die, or at least lose Elder Wand somehow, but I never anticipated Harry would actually do it. Represents a big shift for him. Murdering someone who had done no intentional wrong just to achieve his own ends. That said, your story, and its not out of left field given the character. Seems Harry's moral erosion is increasing. The other stuff in the past was vicious, but this is certainly upping the ante. (I remember him sparing Draco) etc, but I guess after killing Umbridge (a bitch) for his own ends, it became easier. But he's now in burgeoning "Dark Lord" territory. I mean, how different is this from Tom Riddle framing Morfin Gaunt for the deaths of the Riddle family to get Family ring? Both are Hallows, and both are literally sacrificing others to achieve their own priorities and goals. With Umbridge, he had the rationale that she was destructive and wicked ("crucio") and ultimately had to be removed. Albus's death has no moral justification. In fact, he had helped this Harry during the DA and gave him knowledge on Voldemort. Harry might have been right on certain issues (Hogwarts Horcrux), but this is not a moral issue, just a matter of understanding. The biggest reason was he wanted the Elder Wand. He wanted Power. And Albus wouldn't part with it. Really good chapter, and no other critiques besides the two at the top. EDIT: How is Harry going to get the Ring now? The whole point of this was to unite the Hallows presumably. Now all sorts of alarms or warnings will be going off as McGonagall loses her shit. Also, where is Fawkes and what was he doing when Albus was getting killed?