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Snowy Challenge #1

Discussion in 'Challenges' started by Snowy, Feb 2, 2021.

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  1. Snowy

    Snowy First Year

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    Olá pessoal!

    Hoje vou lançar um desafio, tanto para mim quanto para você!

    # Crie um personagem OC, que deve ser a neta de Alphard Black. Quanto ao nome, tenho algumas sugestões (ah e deve ter o nome de uma estrela, ou constelação, como de costume na casa negra)
    Nomes que sugiro: Alcyone, Talitha, Alya, Tania, Bellatrix, Electra, Maia, Rana, Vega, Nashira, Lucida, Miram, Gatria, Ksora, Adhara, Nair, Lyra, Polaris, Cassiopeia, Dorea. (Esses são os que eu me lembro.)
    (Vou chamá-la de Dorea Cassiopeia aqui.)



    # Deve ocorrer no 3º ano.

    # Dorea estudou no Salem Institute (EUA). Ela foi transferida para Hogwarts porque seu pai "Phineas Black" havia falecido. Sua mãe, Regina Malfoy (irmã bastarda de Lucius) sem mais nada nos EUA, decide voltar para a Grã-Bretanha.

    # Dorea deve ser classificada para Slytherin ou Ravenclaw.

    # Dorea é bissexual

    # Quanto às amizades, Dorea não incomoda Harry, ela certamente não suporta Ron ou Hermione, mas ela não é rude com eles. Deve haver uma amizade com Harry em algum momento da história, então você escolhe quando. Eu recomendo que seja logo no início. Algo como Rony é rude e julga Dorea, porque ela é negra, (se você a colocar na Sonserina, Rony vai usar a desculpa dela por ser "moreno", quanto à Corvinal, não sei.)

    Aqui que as coisas começam a mudar, Dorea se aproxima de Harry e eles acabam falando sobre suas famílias, Dorea pergunta por que Harry não mora com "Andrômeda", Harry se confunde e pergunta quem é Andrômeda, Dorea explica que como Andrômeda é parente de sangue mais próximo de Harry, é o que ele deveria ter vivido todos esses anos.

    Dorea também começa a explicar a Harry sobre sua herança. (E tentando não ter clichês aqui, nada de gringotes, nada super maldoso e manipulador do Dumbledore. Digamos que na velhice ele apenas se esqueceu, ele realmente quer o melhor para Harry, mas acaba cometendo um erro e revisando seu jeito de atuando com Harry.) Harry vai para gringotes ano que vem. Acalme-se.


    # Pettigrew é capturado e Sirius livre. (Harry está se mudando com Sirius.) Em Grimmauld Place, Harry, Sirius, Dorea e Regina estão se mudando.


    # Sirius treina Harry e Dorea.

    # Dorea é a herdeira negra (Harry já é Lorde Potter, ele não precisa ser herdeiro dos negros também.)

    # No quarto ano: -> Torneio tribruxo diferente, aqui, a partir do quarto ano você pode colocar o nome na copa, Dorea acaba colocando e sendo campeã de Hogwarts. (Sem Harry competindo aqui.)
    Harry é sequestrado no final do torneio pelo falso Moody, Sirius avisa Regina, os dois vão atrás de Harry. Aqui, você pode matar Regina, isso endurecerá Dorea. Ou você pode endurecê-lo sem matar ninguém. (Seja gentil com os leitores, mwuahaha)

    # 5ª série: FODA-SE A Vadia da UMBRIDGE, assim, literalmente dá uma fodida dor de cabeça nessa vadia nojenta, não deixa ela mandar na escola com facilidade, sei lá, fazer pegadinhas com ela, mandá-la embora. Seja criativo.

    # 6º e 7º ano, o desenvolvimento da guerra, agora Dorea e Harry não estão do lado, eles se juntam à ordem. Ordene missões, caça horcrux, etc.


    Quanto aos casais românticos:

    Dorea / Harry
    ou
    Dorea / Tracey
    ou
    Dorea / Susan

    SEM HAREM, PELO AMOR DE HADES. (sério, sem harém, sem Dorea / Tracey / Susan / Harry)


    Sobre bashing:

    -> Molly batendo, Ron batendo, Gina batendo (Gina é a fangirl maluca de Harry.)
     
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  2. darklordmike

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    Okay, but what's the point of this except to give Harry an excuse to hook up with a bisexual Slytherin cousin? 'Dorea' doesn't actually affect the plot, does she? Why make her a tri-wizard champion if Harry just gets kidnapped anyway? Just write some Harry/OC smut if that's the true goal.

    Rule of Thumb: if a plot requires bashing to be coherent, it's a bad plot.
     
  3. Advice Needed

    Advice Needed Second Year

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    Yup, exactly what I expected from someone who hasn't been on here long enough to know DLP's tastes. So much to unpack here.

    It's OC which stands for Original Character. OOC stands for out of character, and adding 'character' after either is just redundant.

    Fics that feature American schools usually have America-wank/Brit-bashing.

    This is fine.

    Could be fine, but it depends on how well it's written. Most people find it challenging to write healthy and believable heterosexual relationships. If the OC will be paired with a women (whether it's endgame or not) that increases the difficulty tenfold.

    Here's where I have a problem. While Hermione-bashing is somewhat uncommon, Weasley-bashing has been done 100 000 ways to Sunday. It's not original, it's OOC for canon Ron (he wasn't a fan of Malfoy and his ilk, but Harry had a greater dislike towards Slytherin as a whole), and it sets up your OC to be a Mary Sue ("Look, a canon character hates her! Feel sorry for her!").

    'Fanon Potter family tree' combined with 'Harry finds a wizard family to live with' tropes combined.

    Too late for no clichés. I feel like this could so easily become Dumbledore-bashing by either lack of care towards his character, forgetfulness or simply laziness.

    'Harry finds a wizard family to live with' cliché.

    'Summer training montage' cliché. It avoids the 'Harry is heir to 100 houses' cliché, but it still seems like he'll have massive political advantages.

    Somewhat interesting twist, but still cringe (especially with that 'evil laugh' thing at the end). Parents don't need to be killed to harden anyone, it's cliché at this point and rarely done well.

    'Pranking Umbridge with(out) the Weasley twins' cliché.

    Could be fine, depending on how well it's done, but most of the time there's a lot of canon rehash.

    No harem is good, but see above on relationships.

    Wow, I've never seen this before. Molly, Ron, and Ginny being bashed all at the same time? And Ginny's a crazy fangirl who wants to be Lady Potter and access to Harry's vaults? It's quite novel. /s
     
  4. H_A_Greene

    H_A_Greene Professor –§ Prestigious §– DLP Supporter

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    Allow me to quote myself from the competition thread, seeing as I feel it bears repeating here.


     
  5. Snowy

    Snowy First Year

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    About bashing, it’s not supposed to be the focus of the story, Harry won’t hate Ron, he’ll just walk away for a while, as Ron refuses to mature, as for Molly, she’s going to be controlling because in her head Harry is just Ginny and she is destined to marry Harry. And she feels that Harry must see her as a mother and obey her. (As for being bisexual, it is because she may have a crush on Susan or Tracey. And it depends on the writer, if she wants to go ahead with it.)

    I never launched a challenge, I think I need to formulate it better.

    I don't want to make Dumbledore a bad guy, but it's almost impossible to make an independent Harry without criticizing Dumbledore.

    And thanks, you gave me a lot to think about.

    Thank you very much, I will go as I said above, to better formulate my story and try to create something good.
     
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  6. Xiph0

    Xiph0 Counter-Revolutionary Other Guy Admin

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    We've been remarkably patient with you but consider this a last warning. No double-posting, read the stickies clearly before you post, and don't randomly switch your thread to Portugese.
     
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