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Abandoned The Everyoung Dragon by cyrileom - ASOIAF - T

Discussion in 'Almost Recommended' started by Halt, Aug 22, 2019.

  1. Halt

    Halt 1/3 of the Note Bros. Moderator

    May 27, 2010
    Title: The Everyoung Dragon
    Author: cyrileom
    Rating: T
    Genre: Romance
    Status: Abandoned
    Pairings: Daena Targaryen / SI Daeron Targaryen
    Summary: SI into Daeron Targaryen (The Young Dragon) during the War of Dornish Subjugation.
    Link: Spacebattles

    This is different from your typical SI fic in that it's written from the PoV of his sister (who wants to bang him), not the SI himself. Reads like a slowburn Targ incest, but is surprisingly done well.

    No grievous tech uplifts---while the occasional canal might be mentioned offhand, it's more a throwaway comment than anything focused in on and can largely be ignored for all that it impacts the story which is a huge plus. Mostly the draw is watching Daena try (and fail) to bang her brother, until she doesn't.

    Targs gonna Targ amirite.

    Good for anyone who hates those Dornish cunts, and likes the pre-canon history of ASOIAF. Decent technical writing.

    While abandoned, it's ended in a place that doesn't leave much in terms of loose threads.

  2. Alkaraz

    Alkaraz First Year

    Nov 12, 2011
    Really enjoyed this. It’s an enjoyable take on the Young Dragon’s conquest and while we don’t get to see too many of the real ripples occur due to it being abandoned, the way things were executed is more than enough for a nice story. It suffers from only having Daena really interact with Daeron, Aemon, and Viserys, but I find it still works and is certainly library worthy. 4/5
  3. Zombie

    Zombie Lo-fi Snake Jazz Moderator DLP Supporter

    Apr 28, 2007
    Four votes and 1 review.

    Again, we can do better than this.
  4. Donimo

    Donimo Professor

    Jul 4, 2015
    Eh fine. It's a self insert but it avoids being shit like all the others due to the protagonist not being the insert. Instead it's just an interesting fic about kicking the shit out of the Dornish cunts. It's been awhile since I read it so I can't be too detailed but one of the things that stand out in memory as annoying me is the oft used warrior woman cliche of giving them a bow as if it's an equalizer. A trope used by idiotic authors of both fanfiction and well regarded published fiction that have never tried drawing a bow that isn't of modern design negating the need for the tremendous strength needed to fire an arrow over a distance and have it puncture something harder than a bundle of straw.

    I gave it a 4/5 because standards are low for asoiaf fanfiction.
  5. ronin11

    ronin11 First Year

    Jan 16, 2015
    Not all that impressive, honestly. Author is not much of a writer (too much tell, not enough show) and the character through whose eyes we watch the events is a pretty boring person with a handful of interests and desires. The one-dimentional mentorship between her and SI used to progress the story turns into a romantic relationship without much romance in it. Plot is not very engaging because SI doesn't face any true challenges (as is often the case).

    Still let's give credits where they're due, the story is not about dealing with the Long Night which makes it different than 95% of ASoIaF self-inserts and the SI is a just regular guy who doesn't have the knowledge to turn Westeros into industrial superpower in a few years (also unlike the 95% of ASoIaF self-inserts out there).