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WIP The Order by supesaiyan - T

Discussion in 'Almost Recommended' started by Download, Sep 24, 2018.

  1. Download

    Download Dark Lord DLP Supporter

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    Title: The Order
    Author: supesaiyan
    Rating: T
    Genre: Romance
    Status: In-Progress
    Library Category: Romance
    Pairings: Hermione G./Fleur D., Ginny W./Pansy P.
    Summary: An Order of the Phoenix remix: Fleur Delacour is on assignment for Gringotts at Hogwarts at the request of Dumbledore. Umbridge is wreaking havoc as the High Inquisitor. Hermione is coming to grips with her sexuality while helping Harry deal with his troubles. Fleurmione, some Pansy/Hermione, Pansy/Ginny
    Link: https://www.fanfiction.net/s/12976195/1/The-Order

    This fic is annoying. I was looking for some femslash stuff when I found this. It started off as a reasonably interesting femslash romance fic and then because shit about a quarter of the way in.

    The problem is pretty much Umbridge in it becoming comically evil. Her actions just start to seem insane. For example she locks up Fleur (who for plot reasons is working at Hogwarts) like a prisoner in her room, 24/7. Then Hermione and other characters completely brush off her actions. Fleur ends up stunned with no memories and Hermione (after the necessary relationship stuff) doesn't give it a second thought.

    I'm going to give it a 2.5/5 rounded down. I don't even know why I'm posting it here. I guess it pissed me off.

    Edit:
    It actually got worse. I don't know how a fic that started out promising could nosedive so quickly.
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    And worse.
     
    Last edited: Sep 24, 2018
  2. Zombie

    Zombie John Waynes Teeth Prestige DLP Supporter

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    So.. Just a question. Why did you submit it for review?

    I get that you posted it to almost rec. But your review seems to indicate that its total garbage and has no redeeming quality other than the fact that it started out interesting.
     
  3. Download

    Download Dark Lord DLP Supporter

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    Well, as you said, it's not for review. This is the sort of thing I'd have dropped with a few lines in the old almost rec thread but we don't do that anymore. So here it is instead.
     
  4. Zombie

    Zombie John Waynes Teeth Prestige DLP Supporter

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  5. Sataniel

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    And that's why Trash should be open.
     
  6. Zombie

    Zombie John Waynes Teeth Prestige DLP Supporter

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    People have a tendency to get upset when they find their stories sitting in our trashbin.

    I think the point of Almost Recommended has been missed here, but that could just be me.
     
  7. Xion

    Xion Robot Overlord Admin

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    The Order has been updated with a new chapter.

    Story Stats
    Chapters: 24
    Words: 114,692
    Updated: 2019-01-09 06:28:38 UTC
    Published: 2018-06-21 07:28:18 UTC
    Previously updated: 4 months ago

    Brought to you by Scryer story thread updates.
     
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