Title: The Tangibility of Magic
Author: Jolly Rancher also known as Sree
Rating: PG-13(T)
Category: Action/Adventure/Romance
Chapters: 7
Words: 24,065
Updated: June 11, 2005
Published: November 8, 2004
Status: Abandoned
Summary: Post OoTP-After recieving a letter and a book from Sirius, Harry decides to take control of his life. New friends and training. Contains Dark!Harry, but not Evil!Harry. Rating for some profanity.
Link: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/2127514/1/


Checked by Minion, September 2, 2013

 

Thanks

I promise to try to update soon. I'm not at my house right now, so that might be a problem. But I'm coming along!

BTW, it's called "Conversations"

Harry has a little talk with Remus about his use of the Cruciatus Curse...

 

Well, I updated. You can either check it out on ff.net or I posted the 7th chapter on DLP. Here's the link:

http://forums.darklordpotter.net/viewtopic.php?p=4929#4929

Hope you like it.

 

Hehe, it's been a while, hasn't it? Yeah, I've been busy with all kinds of crap...namely college apps. Sorry about that. But bad news: I've been rereading this story, and I've come to the conclusion that it's not as good as I once thought it was. Maybe I've gotten more mature in my reading, I dunno. But this story is riddled with cliches and some dialogues are really not done well. I've decided to do a revamp of the thing and try to take out all the cliches. Hopefully, after I'm done, the story will be many times better than it is now. I'm going to list out the cliches to show what I intend to take out/change.

Cliches:

- Harry deciding to practice the Dark Arts right away after receiving a letter from Sirius. I dunno, maybe I'll have Death Eaters attack Privet Drive and have Harry fights them with Light Magic, realizes it's not working, and starts trying out some spells he read in the book. And I'll probably change the whole letter around as well, the tone didn't really sound like Sirius to me.

- The whole taking the detector spell off his wand. That's definately a bad cliche, with a plot hole, what happens when the Ministry can detect no magic coming off Harry's wand while in school? Yeah, bad idea that.

- A muggle girl taking Harry out and getting his look changed completely.

- Harry scaring Stan and a few other people on the Knight Bus. Not right away, I think I'll have him start scaring people after

- The whole "credit card" thing with Gringotts. I'll probably use a money bag instead. Still a cliche, but it's better than the credit card since it has wizarding roots. I think this is a needed cliche.

- The trunk...oh man, what was I thinking? Yes, definately have to get rid of the trunk. Urgh, I can't believe I had a TRUNK in this. uke:

- Getting a new wand from Ollivander's - NO. I see now that Ollivander would probably report the new purchase to Dumbledore, and not keep it a secret. Yeah, I'll get a new wand from elsewhere.

- His conversation with the Dark Arts book owner. I don't know why I even put the place wide out in the open. Blah. And the dialogue was horrendous. Yeah, I'll probably nix this whole thing and come up with some other way for Harry to get his stuff.

- Uh...after all these changes, I think chapter six and seven will become void. Damn, and I liked those chapters too.


The only problem is, I really don't think Harry has the fashion skills to go out and buy some of his own clothes. That's one of the main reasons I included Cathy in this. And I do like her, but I feel that it's been overused, some muggle taking Harry shopping and giving him a new look. What do you guys think? I really don't know what to do with her. Advice, please?

 

Hmm...ty, I think I can work with that. Though I don't want Cathy to die, I kind of like her. But maybe I can have it in the same scene where Polkiss dies. And have Cathy tortured at the same time. Hmm... :onders::

 

lol, I don't want this story to be turned into a super-powered one where Harry can do things that people have been trying to do for centuries. But perhaps I'll have her fall into a cruciatus induced coma, then have her wake up a few months later.