Puff, Puff, GIVE! Don't break the chain, man...

 

Nah, that was written sober, although, I have been known to smoke up a little bit...

 

Chuck that's a tad too detailed for me to believe that you made it up spur of the moment...

Methinks Chuck has heard those complaints uttered before *snickers*

Jim: I'd been neglecting the Fanfiction world for a while and sadly your story as well. But on Sunday I sat down and read everything that I'd been missing, and I've gotta say: FUCKING AWESOME!

I loved the whole "Not another 'Dark Lord' Floo Call" scene.

And keep killing people... Speaking of which this should be the unofficial Theme Song of this Fanfiction:

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=rqXN7pv6j-E

Another One Bites the Dust

I'm sorry -- but with all the deaths so far I had to post it... I couldn't help myself.

 

Great chapter again.

I don't think Wormtail would have run out of the room after his punishment without answering the Dark Lord's question or at least saying something, I know he's changed but I don't think any death eaters would just leave.

Why would he want to leave Hogsmaede standing? What good does it do him? Does this have a place later on in the story?

I kind of thought the Not Another Dark Lord scene, thought it kind of killed the atmosphere but it was funny, I just like darker stories I guess, I can't see Voldemort doing that, Did the aurors go to check out the first Dark Lord calling?

The who's joking now Ms. Brown line was a nice touch.

The Fleur battle scene was good, Harry sure has a strong will to be able to fight off a naked super charged Veela radiating lust.

Goblin execution, when the goblin throws the knife couldn't Scrigmeour get out of the way himself? He's a very well known ex-auror and in a less than friendly environment he'd probably be on his toes.

Nice job.

 

Well I'll be damned. I actually didn't like this story when it first came out. That'll show me to judge too soon. Jbern kudos to you mate. I wanted a fic where Harry wasnt told what a great person his mother was and he was turning out more like her than James.

This fic has made it into my favorites list.

 

Now you have seen the Light, Nexus. Will you kneel and fully submit yourself to It, and Its greatness?

 

I am the embodiment of dark.....Damn...now I cant see. * turns on the light.

Well another couple of chapters down and I'd like to say that Peter's change was .... unique. Though Bellatrix's death was a bit dissappointing. I was hoping for Peter to kill her in a bid of power. The story has turned out great so far.

 

Thanks for all the positive feedback!

Gio - Be safe in Cairo. People seem to be enjoying the chapter by chapter death list in this story.

Darius -glad you liked it. You made some good points in your post. Peter probably should have said something. I liked the image of him scurrying away trying to get his breath back. In this instance Voldy wants to take over. Leveling Hogsmeade does not advance this. The whole point of the attack was to draw the Order and the Aurors into a diversionary battle preventing anyone from realizing that #12 is under attack.

Voldy called the aurors to attempt to draw them into battle. He didn't count on getting Lavender. It's probably quite a shock to him that people are actually crank calling the aurors and telling them they are Lord Voldemort.

Rufus was already moving when his overeager bodyguards leapt into action. One pushed him down to the ground while another moved in front of him. Further complications were prevented by Harry banishing the knife.

Chuck - You are making some vary interesting posts today.

Nexus - Welcome to the party. Heck, you've still got over 10 chapters to catch up. I'll be interested to see what you think of it when you get to chapter 26.

Jim

 

What can I say? I'm an interesting guy.

 

This is true You are very interesting. You make me wonder who needs mental help more me or you.


I wanna see Snape get his ass kicked. Or seeing Harry getting his ass kicked and coming back later and kicking Snape's ass even more is good too. As long as Snape gets his ass kicked I dont care.

 

I finally made it too Chap 26. It was quite funny imagining Harry running around like a beheaded chicken being chased by a very gorffeous and a Very naked Fleur.

For a minute there I had thought that you were going to pair Bill with Emmeline. Guess not.

Found the 'floo call' amusing.

p.s. YIKES!! this thread has over 35K views.

 

Love your story.

Since everybody else has been complimenting it, I've been trying to think about what's wrong with it as my duty as a reviewer. And it's been pretty hard, but I finally found something!

1st I think the time frame is too short. You've mentioned that it is, so I'm pretty sure it'll be fixed.

2nd I don't really see any long-term plans in the war you're writing. Sure, Voldemort attacks and Harry/Dumbledore defend, and there are a lot of battles. But Voldemort doesn't seem to have any plan that takes longer than a month to implement. He just says, "I'll attack this now. I'll ally with you now."

For example, he could be searching for the ingredients of a ritual to become stronger (Dragonmasters by Naia), make preparations for an attack on Hogwarts a year before he actually attacks, spy on the Ministry to prepare to destroy the Floo system (Young Again by Taliath), slowly wreak chaos in the Muggle world to attempt to gain control of it (Sunset over Britain by Bobmin), search for a long-lost city with tremendous powers (Shadow Play by Thor Naida), Operation Evanesco (Resistance of Azkaban by Shezza88 ) etc. In OoTP, Voldemort planned the whole time to find a prophecy.

And you should do the same for Harry.

It'd make your already great story a lot more interesting and suspenseful. Just make a few mentions of a mysterious item or plan Voldemort has, and you'll load on the reviews.

 

Well there's a lot of writing in there and I appreciate your comments, but at the same time from previous chapters we know that -

1. He has Madame Edgecombe working on a way to completely subvert the Floo network. They are close to a point where they can perform widespread monitoring. They are also looking into ways to make portions inaccessible or redirectable to support outright kidnapping (Floojacking?).

2. Dolohov and Voldemort engaged in some international strategy a ways back. They were looking beyond Britain at their next military targets as well as influencing elections in some of the smaller and more pliable Ministries in Europe. Dolohov is pressuring the Vampire communities and gathering the giants to the cause (as indicated by Hagrid when he came to Harry's party). He is also responsible for the widespread recruitment of those pesky foriegn fighters that Rufus was on his soapbox preaching about in the Prophet.

3. Penny has been sent under a new identity to teach at a smaller school in America and to screen for future recruits to the cause.

4. His General (Madame Faircloth) is now fighting a guerrilla style battle against the Ministry giving token victories to Scrimgeour and undercutting his argument for a full scale draft and mobilization. Giving the public a false sense of security, which will make the next large assault seem just as severe as the attack at Azkaban.

5. By sending Flint to Gringotts without the dark mark he laid the foundations for damaging the Wizard and Goblin relations to counter Harry's allowing the Goblins to use his votes in the Wizengamot.

6. The current attacks in chapter 26 are designed to draw the Aurors and the Order into some meaningless battles at 'soft targets' while sending assaination squads after Harry Potter and several of Dumbledores allies in the Wizengamot.

7. When Dumbles ambushed Voldy, what was Voldy doing? Trying to consolidate Greybacks werewolf pack and bring them more actively into the war.

8. Voldemort had also used kidnapping as a method of forcing families to either support him or forfeit one of their members (Zabini and Compton families). I haven't really said what he was trying to do with Krum, on purpose.

9. The Dementors were supposed to cause widespread problems in the Muggle world sapping the Ministry's assets. That hasn't really panned out because Harry can kill them and the Dementors don't like that idea.

On the other side, Harry does what he can. You are right, he flies by the seat of his pants, but then again what can he do? He's trying to help the other kids get training. He's made in roads for Human and Goblin relations to try and prevent a Goblin rebellion regardless of who wins this war. He is publically supporting the Minister despite his distaste of being a showdog.

Dumbledore continues to seek allies abroad. Fleur was heading back to France to try and further his agenda before she was abducted. He made a tactical decision to use Aaragog and his forces and then serve them up on a silver platter to the centaurs to prevent them from overruning the forest, Hogsmeade and eventually the castle.

Scrimgeour is of course running his own agenda...

So, you might see a series of small battles, but if you read closer or maybe if I spell it out a little more blatantly there are long term strategies at work.

I do appreciate your opinion, but I don't really agree with it. Voldemort is working on his Global plan. He isn't counting on one single thing to be the path to victory. The Ministry and Light side are trying to play catch up. Each side is slightly overextended in some ways.

Jim

 

So there!

:blows a raspberry:

 

Rofl@Chuck.

 

Just a quick update. Chapter 27 is progressing slowly. Right now I only have the first scene done. It's not even enough for a tease. Work has just been too busy and as the wife points out there is a house to be cleaned among other things. I hope to have enough for a tease sometime over the weekend and the full chapter sometime next week.~Jim

 

I look forward to the update, one of my favorite HP stories.

You should point out that she is the wife and tell her to get to work. It will work well, honest. *cough*

 

I will hazard a guess and say that all updates would cease, if I told her that. Unless the dead are capable of writing from beyond the grave.

Jim

 

Tupacs been doing that for 10 years man.

 

Back to the clones theme...you need at least three...

1. to write full time
2. to do 'real' work
3. to handle the 'honey-do list'