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Abandoned War of Wills by Heather Sinclair - M

Discussion in 'Almost Recommended' started by sirius009, Feb 16, 2006.

  1. sirius009

    sirius009 Minister of Magic

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    Title: War of Wills
    Author: HeatherSinclair
    Category: Romance/Action Adventure
    Rating: Mature
    Pairing: Harry/Susan
    Chapters: 8
    Words: 20,766
    Updated: December 18, 2007
    Published: January 29, 2006
    Status: Abandoned

    Summary: Has Harry finally snapped? Serendipity throws Susan Bones in his path and Harry finds out what Loyality and Working Hard mean to a determined Hufflepuff. HS
    Link:http://www.fanfiction.net/s/2775697/1/
    alright the summary sucks but the story is decent so far and the pairing is good. It is sorta romantic but not overly so, hints at dumbledore bashing and at some training. Didn't know where else to put this fic..


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  2. razz

    razz Seventh Year

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    I read the first paragraph. Ek.
     
  3. Antivash

    Antivash Until we meet again... DLP Supporter Retired Staff

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    eh... its ok...ill read it prolly since i like HP/SB fics...
     
  4. Mordecai

    Mordecai Drunken Scotsman –§ Prestigious §– DLP Supporter

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    its actually quite good. Not highly original, but not overly cliched as well, which iis about al we can hope for now
     
  5. Midknight

    Midknight Middy is SPAI! DLP Supporter Retired Staff

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    First chapter is absolute shit. After that, it gets decent, but Harry hooking up with Susan just because they're the last of their lines, and if any man asks she HAS to say yes by law.. ug.

    If the first chapter got salvaged, and that stupid bit taken out, it'd be so much better.
     
  6. Galleon

    Galleon DA Member

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    It was ok, but I agree with Midknight. That whole "we're the last of our lines so what the hell? want to get married?" thing is messed up. It has a lot of potential, but right now I'm not really sure I want to continue reading it...
     
  7. Midknight

    Midknight Middy is SPAI! DLP Supporter Retired Staff

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    I could agree with the last of our lines bit, if it wasn't followed with "by law we have to if you or anyone asks" and if there was soime build up to it. The way it's just tossed out there kills the fic for me.
     
  8. Admonkeystrator

    Admonkeystrator Seventh Year

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    IMO the fic was somewhat redeemed when Harry Ice-Picked Dholov, and near-beheaded Wormtail with Garaut wire.
     
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